我是一堵墻。
一堵深灰色并不古老卻被人們遺棄的墻。
我生命的全部意義在于存在和緘默……
一群孩子在我的身上大肆涂鴉,胡寫亂畫,我并沒有對他們產(chǎn)生厭惡的情感。因?yàn)樗麄冞小,還不懂事,當(dāng)他們長大了就會明白是非對錯。他們充滿稚氣的可愛的小臉上充盈著一種快樂,一種純真。我喜歡這純真的笑靨。
一棵槐樹依附著我不斷的生長,由我承受他的絕大部分重力,根深深地扎入墻基,侵犯著我的領(lǐng)地,一副根深蒂固、欲橫空出世的模樣。我沒有拒絕他的依賴,更沒有為他的侵占而爭吵,因?yàn)槲覑勰且黄渚G,那一片鮮亮,那一片枝繁葉茂。
那不論有意還是無意的侵襲,我都沒有吭聲沒有抗?fàn),我并不了解基督教,更不領(lǐng)會“當(dāng)別人打你左臉,把右臉也給他打”的座右銘。我僅僅是用自己的一點(diǎn)兒傷痛就換來了他人的快樂與滿足,這不是脆弱,也不是膽怯,是忍耐嗎?生活依舊如此,不算暗淡,但也并不多彩。
又是一群孩子,他們手拿大刷子和涂料,仿佛又要大干一場了。我坦然地面對他們,并不想發(fā)表任何評論,但是看他們那認(rèn)真嚴(yán)肅地表情,我衷心的祝福他們成為藝術(shù)家。而當(dāng)他們離去,我才發(fā)現(xiàn)自己周身大變模樣,原本沉悶的色彩被一片色彩斑斕極富想象力的色彩所代替……
還是那棵老槐樹。在風(fēng)雨交加之中,我似乎隨時都有崩潰的可能,然而那寬大的枝葉為我遮蔽了風(fēng)雨的打擊,他用堅(jiān)固的根系握住我,我可以安靜的面對暴風(fēng)驟雨……日子一天一天過去,人生會有很多的不如意,但也不乏快樂、溫馨。漸漸地,我明白,善待他人,就是善待自己。
我的故事里,有對人生的小小感悟。
[名師點(diǎn)評]
此文構(gòu)思及行文皆有巧妙之處:
1.妙在用心用新。揭示景、物包含的意蘊(yùn),可謂“用心”;獨(dú)辟蹊徑,角度有創(chuàng)新,可謂“用新”。作者以“物”的視角來描寫和感悟人生--善待他人,就是善待自己。這樣構(gòu)思和行文可謂精彩獨(dú)到,既用心又用新。
3.思載千年,視野開闊?薜归L城的孟姜,橫掃六合的戰(zhàn)車,成吉思汗的鐵騎,來自八方的商人,爽朗微笑的總統(tǒng),風(fēng)姿瀟灑的外賓……作者思載千年,視野開闊,站在時空的角度反思和展望長城,這堵墻有罪惡,有無愧,是雄偉的,是笑傲世界的一堵墻。
2.線索清晰,層次豐富!拔沂且欢隆瓑Α敝糜诿慷味挝,貫穿全篇,形成了一條明晰的線索。文章首句統(tǒng)領(lǐng)全文,整個敘述在歷史的長河中起伏跌宕,暗含的意蘊(yùn)豐富,富有層次富有深度,啟人深思。
河北一考生
自古至今,我屹立在這里,風(fēng)風(fēng)雨雨--
我是一堵墻,一堵在秦始皇苛政下建造的墻。沒錯,我就是萬里長城,一堵長長的城墻,我是用黎民的血肉和汗水筑就的,建造之日我就有了靈魂。鍛煉
我是一堵隔開生死兩界的墻。有一天,一女子來到我的腳下,據(jù)稱是姜家的大女兒,向我哭訴生死兩茫茫。當(dāng)時我看到的是,孟姜女不是一個人,而是一批人。原來我的誕生是建立在別人的生命之上!既然是這樣,我為什么要茍活于世上?我轟然倒塌……我是罪惡的一堵墻!
不知過了多久,我被重新喚起。我又得到了第二次生命。我如涅盤的鳳凰,欲火重生,我懂得了我的職責(zé)所在,那是千百次的夢囈呵,保家衛(wèi)國,保家衛(wèi)國……匈奴來犯,我用自己結(jié)實(shí)的胸膛將他們擋在外面,他們憤怒了,發(fā)瘋般地向我射去。痛,痛徹心扉!但我決不會向他們妥協(xié)!我要履行我的職責(zé)?粗倥趩实牡谋秤,看著遍體鱗傷的自己,我笑了,我終于可以把自己從罪惡中救贖出來。我是無愧于天地的一堵墻!
橫掃六合的戰(zhàn)車,西出陽關(guān)的商旅,打著呼哨渾身酒氣的成吉思汗的鐵騎,從這墻前驕傲地走過去。滄桑巨變,我見證了一個個朝代的興衰存亡,一個個帝王將相的悲歡離合。年年歲歲花相似,歲歲年年人不同,我有所感悟:天地萌生了萬物,每個事物,來到這世上,都有自己應(yīng)盡的職責(zé),但并不都是轟轟烈烈的。像我,只是一堵保家衛(wèi)國、再普通不過的城墻,但我并不自卑,因?yàn)槲抑,我是外層空間能看到的地球上惟一的人工痕跡。我是雄偉的一堵墻!
如今,我敞開胸襟迎來了四面八方的億萬游人。他們之中有總統(tǒng),有商人,有教師,有學(xué)生,有開心的演員與體育明星。照相機(jī)咔嚓咔嚓響著,但響聲又被嘩嘩的笑聲淹沒。我看到一位風(fēng)姿瀟灑的外賓,踏上烽火臺的頂端,向什么人頻頻飛吻,接著高舉雙臂,做成一個V字,仿佛向著美好的未來,發(fā)出爽朗的笑聲。如今,我是笑傲世界的一堵墻!
我是一堵墻,一堵平凡而偉大的墻,對于未來,我充滿希望……
[名師點(diǎn)評]
作為即興的考場作文,考生善于調(diào)動積累,巧妙構(gòu)思:
1.視角獨(dú)特,文筆暢達(dá)?忌\(yùn)用第一人稱,采用擬人化手筆,以物的視角來敘事描寫,這樣更利于自然的抒發(fā)情感。文章先抑后揚(yáng),文筆暢達(dá),有曲折,有波瀾,有自信,有展望,表達(dá)工整簡潔,明凈爽利。
Every morning John goes to work by a train He always 86.
buys a newspaper, it helps to make the time pass more 87.
quickly. One Thursday morning,he turned on the sports 88.
page. He wanted to see the report about an important 89.
football match the night before The report was such interesting 90.
that he forgot to get off at his station He didn’t know it when 91.
he saw the sea He got off at the next station. and had to 92.
wait long time for a train to go back of course,he arrived 93.
very lately at the office His boss was very angry when Tom 94.
told him why he was late. "Work is very more important than 95.
football.
附加題(共20小題;每小題0. 5分,滿分10分)
在短文的空格中填入恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~,使全文意義完整、通順。
Once upon a time there was a child ready to be 1 . He asked God how he could live on earth 2 so small and helpless. God replied that he had chosen one of the many 3 to take care of him. But the child 4 sure if he really wanted to go
He 5 and asked. “What 6 I Can’t understand people around me?”
God patted his head and said. “She will teach you the most beautiful and sweet words you will 7 hear.”
“And what am I going to do when I want to 8 to you?”
God 9 to answer that question too,“She will place your hands together and will teach you how to 10 ”
“I’ve heard that on earth there are bad men. Who will 11 me?”
“She will. even if it 12 risking her life!”
“But l will be sad because I will not see you 13. ”the child continued warily.
God smiled,“She will often speak of me and will teach you the 14 for you to come back to me ever though I will always be 15 to you. ”
At that moment,there Was much 16 in Heaven,but voices from the earth could already be heard The child knew he had to start on his 17 very soon. He asked God one more question,softly, “Oh God,if l am about to leave now, please tell me her 18 . ”
God touched the child 19 the shoulder and answered,“It’s not hard to remember. You
85. 請對你的羞恥行為作個解釋,不然我饒不了你.
Please your shameful behavior, or I won’t have you that.
84. 淡水對我們來說必不可少,我們一定要保護(hù)它不受污染。
Fresh water is us,so we must it being polluted.
83. 不能走到加拿大的首都渥太華真是太遺憾了.
It is that you can’t go Ottawa Canada’s Capital.
82. 我厭倦了旅行中的一切. 我正在考慮結(jié)婚定居下來.
I all this travel. I am thinking of getting married and
.
81. 10月2日是印度全國性節(jié)日,紀(jì)念莫漢達(dá)斯·甘地幫助印度脫離英國而獨(dú)立.
October 2 is India’s national festival Mohandas Gandhi who helped India’s. Britain.
湖北省互聯(lián)網(wǎng)違法和不良信息舉報平臺 | 網(wǎng)上有害信息舉報專區(qū) | 電信詐騙舉報專區(qū) | 涉歷史虛無主義有害信息舉報專區(qū) | 涉企侵權(quán)舉報專區(qū)
違法和不良信息舉報電話:027-86699610 舉報郵箱:58377363@163.com