Question

假設(shè)你叫李華，現(xiàn)是天津大學(xué)的一名新生。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示，給你中學(xué)的英語(yǔ)老師李老師寫一封感謝信，表達(dá)對(duì)他的愛(ài)戴和尊敬。詞數(shù)100左右。
提示：
1.對(duì)英語(yǔ)李老師教學(xué)的評(píng)價(jià)。
2．回顧在校時(shí)你的心情。
3．對(duì)老師的理解和祝愿。
信的開頭、結(jié)尾已經(jīng)寫好，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Dear Mr. Li.
I'm very excited to write to…_______________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________________
Hoping to hear from you soon.
Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Li,
I’m very excited to write to express my thanks to you. I am now a freshman of Nanjin University, which I have been dreaming about. Mr. Li, I still remember the days when you taught me English. My English has been improved greatly because of your creative work. However, at one time, the pressure of examinations, too much homework and the high expectations made me depressed. I was tired of the warning that if I didn’t do my best, I wouldn’t have the chance to go to college. Thanks for your encouragement; if not, I wouldn’t have realized my dream. And now I really understand you. I wish more and more of your students could go to their ideal colleges. Are you still so busy? How I miss you!
Hoping to hear from you soon.
Yours,
Li Hua

試題分析：本書面表達(dá)是要求學(xué)生寫一封書信，材料非常簡(jiǎn)單，學(xué)生很容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的�？忌�在寫作之前必修認(rèn)真審題，首先要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，首先寫現(xiàn)在的狀況，所以要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。回憶過(guò)去的狀況和老師的教誨，用一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)。要求讓你給英語(yǔ)老師李老師寫信，因此本文必須用第一人稱。再有就是不能根據(jù)材料逐字逐句的翻譯應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如be excited to，express sth. to sb.，at one time, be tired of, do one’s best, have the chance to do, realize one’s dream, hear from，還運(yùn)用了wish引導(dǎo)的虛擬語(yǔ)氣和which、when引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：because of，however, 等等。