Question

假定你是李華， 明年即將參加高考（National College Entrance Examination ）。高三的壓力很大，在學(xué)習(xí)上和心理上遇到一些困難，希望得到學(xué)校輔導(dǎo)中心（Learning Center）的輔導(dǎo)員(tutor)的幫助。根據(jù)學(xué)校規(guī)定，你需書(shū)面預(yù)約，請(qǐng)按下列要點(diǎn)寫(xiě)一封信：
1. 本人簡(jiǎn)介；     2. 求助內(nèi)容 ；   3. 約定時(shí)間 ；   4. 你的聯(lián)系方式 （Email : lihua@163.com ; Tel: 34567821  )
注意： 1. 詞數(shù)： 100 左右 ， 信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
Dear tutor ,
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Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version:
Dear tutor ,
My name is LiHua ,a Senior Three student .I am writing to you because of the difficulty and the great stress I have in my study. I will take the National College Entrance Examination next year , but I still can’t do well in my English, however hard I try. As a result ,I am worried all day and can’t concentrate on my study ,so I turn to the Learning Centre for help . I will appreciate it if you can give me some advice .It would mean a great deal to me.  I wonder if you are available on Friday ,when I have no classes . My Email : lihua@163.com ; and you can also contact me at Tel: 34567821
Looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely
Li Hua

試題分析：本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是要求寫(xiě)一封信進(jìn)行預(yù)約。對(duì)書(shū)信這種寫(xiě)作題材同學(xué)們非常熟悉，而且寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容貼近學(xué)生生活，所以不會(huì)感覺(jué)無(wú)話可說(shuō)。不過(guò)在寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意對(duì)本人簡(jiǎn)介、求助內(nèi)容、約定時(shí)間和聯(lián)系方式等要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行陳述時(shí)，要適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞以使文章內(nèi)容連貫，上下銜接自然。在時(shí)態(tài)方面，可以使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。此外本文是向輔導(dǎo)員尋求幫助，所以要注意語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔明了，語(yǔ)氣委婉客氣。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章要點(diǎn)全面，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。作者用流暢的語(yǔ)言表述了自己寫(xiě)信的目的，而且對(duì)要點(diǎn)的陳述簡(jiǎn)潔明了，條理清晰。文中I will appreciate it if you can give me some advice .It would mean a great deal to me等表述請(qǐng)求部分的用詞準(zhǔn)確貼切，語(yǔ)氣委婉禮貌。讓步狀語(yǔ)從句however hard I try和定語(yǔ)從句 the great stress I have in my study以及并列句的使用都顯示了作者對(duì)語(yǔ)言很強(qiáng)的運(yùn)用能力。