Question

閱讀下面的短文，然后按要求寫一篇150字左右的英語(yǔ)短文。

A boy found an eagle’s egg and he put it in the nest of a hen. The eagle hatched and thought he was a chicken. He grew up doing what chickens do—scratching for food and flying short distances. It was a dull life. Gradually the eagle grew older and biller. One day he and his chicken friends saw a beautiful bird soaring on the currents of air, high above the mountains.
“Oh, I wish I could fly like that!” said the eagle. The chicken replied, “Don’t give it another thought. That’s the mighty(強(qiáng)大的) eagle, the king of all birds—you could never be like him!” And the eagle didn’t give it another thought. He went on cackling and complaining about life. He died thinking he was a chicken.
My friends, you too were born an eagle. The Creator intended you to be an eagle, so don't listen to the chickens!
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1、以約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容。
2、以約120個(gè)詞談?wù)勀銓?duì)“自信”的看法，內(nèi)容包括：
(1) 鷹成為雞的原因；
(2) 這則故事的啟示。
【寫作要求】
1、可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2、作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。
【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】
概括準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語(yǔ)篇連貫。

Answer 1

Hatched by a hen, an eagle lived like a chicken. He wanted to fly like an eagle but discouraged by his fellows. Eventually he died bitterly without knowing he himself was an eagle. (33 words)
Some factors may account for why the eagle was made a chicken. Firstly, the eagle was influenced by the chickens around him, scratching for food just like them without a higher goal. Secondly, the eagle failed to reflect on himself, so he didn’t know he had the potential to fly high. Finally, he lacked enough self-confidence, so he gave up his dream of flying like an eagle, just because of the discouraging words from others.
There are many such eagles in our daily life. I think we should avoid negative influences, set a high goal and work hard to achieve it. Besides, we must be confident in our potential and make good use of it to become real eagles.

試題分析：本文屬于讀寫任務(wù)寫作，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認(rèn)真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個(gè)詞寫一篇短文，按照要點(diǎn)去表達(dá)，不能有遺漏，寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。寫作時(shí)盡量使用自己會(huì)的單詞、詞組和句型，同時(shí)也要注意使用一些高級(jí)語(yǔ)法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文觀點(diǎn)明確，有理有據(jù)，不乏好的短語(yǔ)和句子：account for是…原因， reflect on反思， gave up 放棄，because of 因?yàn)椋瑂et a high goal設(shè)立很高的目標(biāo)， be confident in對(duì)…自信， make good use of 充分利用，Hatched by a hen, an eagle lived like a chicken. 這句話用了過(guò)去分詞做狀語(yǔ)， the eagle was influenced by the chickens around him, scratching for food just like them without a higher goal. 這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語(yǔ)， 還有范文還使用了Firstly, Secondly,  Finally, Besides,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。