Question

每年過圣誕節(jié)，總有部分年輕人欣喜若狂，他們還舉行各種活動(dòng)來過圣誕節(jié)。對(duì)此有人認(rèn)為他們崇洋媚外，有人認(rèn)為這是開放和外向的表現(xiàn)。請(qǐng)圍繞中國人是否應(yīng)該過圣誕節(jié)這一話題寫一篇英語短文。內(nèi)容應(yīng)該包括：
簡單敘述現(xiàn)象
是否贊成中國人過圣誕節(jié)等外國節(jié)日，以及你的理由
你的建議
注意：
詞數(shù)不少于80。
可適當(dāng)增減細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫。

Answer 1

As the development of global communication, western customs are imported into China. Western festivals, especially Christmas, are now welcomed by/gain popularities quickly among Chinese, especially the new generation. Should we Chinese celebrate these festivals?
I would like to say we Chinese should not be too eager and excited to observe Christmas, because we should value our own culture and tradition first. Although celebrating western festivals shows China's opening up to the world, over appreciating other cultures will have a bad effect on keeping our own.
So my suggestion is that we regard Christmas as an opportunity to shop and to enjoy ourselves, but at the same time realize that our traditional festivals are more precious.

試題分析：本篇書面表達(dá)的要求包括三方面內(nèi)容，即敘述現(xiàn)象、表明態(tài)度、提出建議，所以在謀篇布局上可以使用三個(gè)段落來分別表述這三個(gè)要點(diǎn)，這樣的安排會(huì)使文章有層次感。因?yàn)椴牧辖o出內(nèi)容較少，所以要充分發(fā)揮想象力，適當(dāng)增添細(xì)節(jié)，以便使文章內(nèi)容豐滿。此外還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，以使文章語言通順流暢，上下銜接自然。在時(shí)態(tài)方面應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來描述當(dāng)前存在的現(xiàn)象。參考詞匯 ：in my opinion，in favor of等。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本篇范文語言簡練流暢，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，要點(diǎn)全面。采用三段式的安排使文章脈絡(luò)清晰，層次分明。作者在講述完現(xiàn)象之后，用Should we Chinese celebrate these festivals?這一設(shè)問句引出下文，起到了很好承上啟下的作用，此外at the same time， As the development of global communication,和especially 等詞匯的使用也使文章內(nèi)容銜接緊湊。此外文中多種復(fù)合句使用不僅使文章避免了句式的單調(diào)也給文章錦上添花，使得范文亮點(diǎn)紛呈，比如原因狀語從句because we should value our own culture and tradition first. 讓步狀語從句。Although celebrating western festivals shows China's opening up to the world，和表語從句So my suggestion is that we regard Christmas as an opportunity to shop等。