Question

假如你是某雜志社編輯Mr. Knowledgeable,根據(jù)中學(xué)生 Bob的來(lái)信內(nèi)容，給他寫(xiě)封回信，幫助解決他所遇到的問(wèn)題。字?jǐn)?shù)80—100，開(kāi)頭已給出。
Dear Knowledgeable,
My problem is that I can’t get on with my family. My parents always say “no” to my ideas without any reason. So I often quarrel(吵架) with them. Also, my brother is not very nice to me. He always refuses to let me watch my favorite TV show. Instead, he watches whatever he wants until late at night. I don’t think this is fair. At home, I always feel lonely and nervous. Is that normal? What can I do?
Bob
Dear Bob,
                                                                              
                                                                              
Knowledgeable

Answer 1

Dear Bob,
It’s normal to have these feelings. Why don’t you talk about these feelings with your family? First,it’s not right to quarrel with your parents. I don’t think quarrelling can solve problems. You’d better have a talk with your parents. Tell them to have a discussion with you before saying “no” to your ideas.  Second, Why not sit down and communicate with your brother? You should explain that you don’t mind him watching TV all the time. However, he should let you watch your favourite TV show. I hope things will be better soon.
Knowledgeable

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們以某雜志社編輯的身份給Bob寫(xiě)一封回信。首先我們必須要讀懂Bob的來(lái)信，知道Bob有什么問(wèn)題。根據(jù)這封信的內(nèi)容可知，Bob遇到的問(wèn)題是他和他的家人相處得不好，他經(jīng)常跟父母吵架，和哥哥的關(guān)系也不好。因此我們要根據(jù)這一內(nèi)容，幫助Bob解決他的問(wèn)題，給他一些建議。這些內(nèi)容需要我們自己來(lái)想象，給出的建議要符合這個(gè)情景，能對(duì)Bob起到幫助的作用。例如，我們可以建議他坐下來(lái)和父母談一談，把你的想法跟父母說(shuō)清楚，爭(zhēng)取獲得他們的理解和支持；和自己的哥哥也要進(jìn)行很好的溝通，讓他知道你的意見(jiàn)，互相理解。在提建議的時(shí)候嗎，我們經(jīng)常用到一些句型，如why not...， you should...， you’d better...等。注意語(yǔ)句之間的連接，使文章表達(dá)流暢。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。首先作者先對(duì)Bob面臨的這些問(wèn)題給予理解，這是一個(gè)普遍的問(wèn)題，并不是只有他自己碰到。然后作者給Bob提出了建議，如First,it’s not right to quarrel with your parents. I don’t think quarrelling can solve problems.，和父母爭(zhēng)吵是不對(duì)的，這解決不了問(wèn)題。然后You’d better have a talk with your parents.是建議他跟父母進(jìn)行一次談話(huà)。對(duì)于和哥哥之間的矛盾，作者也是建議他和哥哥好好談一談。從這一點(diǎn)上來(lái)說(shuō)，這些建議有點(diǎn)重復(fù)，沒(méi)有新意。但文章整體的表達(dá)還是很流暢的，文中的句式句型使用也很正確。像表示提建議的句型，作者就用到了why not...，you’d better, you should等。還有賓語(yǔ)從句和時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句等。