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3．假如你是班長，學(xué)期結(jié)束時(shí)你要給同學(xué)作簡短的評價(jià)．你班的李華這個(gè)學(xué)期變化很大，請你根據(jù)提示寫一篇簡評．

過去	功課不好，常與同學(xué)爭吵，垃圾被他撒的滿地都是，課桌總是一團(tuán)糟．
現(xiàn)在	自從老師和他溝通后，有了很大變化．（學(xué)習(xí)、與同學(xué)相處、生活…）
結(jié)果	父母、老師對他滿意多了．
希望	…．

要求：
1）所寫內(nèi)容必須包括提供的所有信息，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．
2）括號部分須用3、4句話展開合理想象，作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．
3）文章不少于90詞，開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
4）語氣通順，意思連貫，語法正確，條理清楚，字跡工整．
5）文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名、校名及地名．
This term，Li Hua has changed a lot． In the past he didn't do well in his subjects．He often quarreled with his classmates．Rubbish was spread all over the floor by him．His desk was always in a mess．He has changed a lot since the teacher had communication with him．Now he works hard at his lessons．He gets along well with his classmates．He often sweeps the floor．His parents and teachers are satisfied with him．I hope he will get good grades in the coming exam．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是談?wù)劺钊A這個(gè)學(xué)期的變化．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過去時(shí)．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1過去：功課不好，常與同學(xué)爭吵，垃圾被他撒的滿地都是，課桌總是一團(tuán)糟．
2現(xiàn)在：自從老師和他溝通后，有了很大變化．（學(xué)習(xí)、與同學(xué)相處、生活…）
3結(jié)果：父母、老師對他滿意多了．
4希望
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
do well in 擅長
quarrel with sb 與某人爭吵
in a mess 混亂
get along with  與某人相處
be satisfied with sb  對某人滿意
【高分句型】
1．Rubbish was spread all over the floor by him．
一般過去時(shí)的被動(dòng)語態(tài)was/were+過去分詞．
2．He has changed a lot since the teacher had communication with him．
since引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句．
3．I hope he will get good grades in the coming exam．
hope后是省略了that的賓語從句．get good grades 取得好成績．

解答 This term，Li Hua has changed a lot． In the past he didn't do well in his subjects．He often quarreled with his classmates．Rubbish was spread all over the floor by him．【高分句型】His desk was always in a mess．（過去：功課不好，常與同學(xué)爭吵，垃圾被他撒的滿地都是，課桌總是一團(tuán)糟．）He has changed a lot since the teacher had communication with him．【高分句型】Now he works hard at his lessons．He gets along well with his classmates．He often sweeps the floor．（自從老師和他溝通后，有了很大變化．）His parents and teachers are satisfied with him．（父母、老師對他滿意多了）I hope he will get good grades in the coming exam．【高分句型】（希望）

點(diǎn)評 本題要求寫一篇給同學(xué)作的評價(jià)．本文所給材料比較詳細(xì)．寫作中注意將李華過去和現(xiàn)在的一些情況介紹清楚，并描述自己對他將來的希望．結(jié)合材料可知本文時(shí)態(tài)人稱問題比較復(fù)雜，涉及過去，現(xiàn)在和將來三種時(shí)態(tài)，注意時(shí)態(tài)與時(shí)間狀語的搭配問題及主謂一致問題．寫作中注意使用連詞，序數(shù)詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系．最后，注意不要犯語法、句法以及搭配性錯(cuò)誤，寫好后反復(fù)讀幾遍，適當(dāng)修改．此類作文首先要做的就是認(rèn)真閱讀材料，不能跑題偏題．寫作中注意一些基礎(chǔ)的寫作常識，不犯低級錯(cuò)誤．只要平時(shí)積累足夠，就一定能獲得滿意的分?jǐn)?shù)．另外為了應(yīng)付考試，可以有選擇的背誦一些范文，這樣應(yīng)考時(shí)就會有法可依．