Question

假設你是某健康雜志的醫(yī)學顧問Dr White，一名叫李明的中學生來信說，他所在班級近視的學生超過總數(shù)的一半，而且大多數(shù)學生的視力越來越差，她感到非常擔心。請你針對她所說的情況，結合下面要點，用英語給李華回信，告訴她應該如何保護視力。
堅持做眼保健操
定期做視力檢查
臥床或乘車時不要看書
不要用手揉眼睛
如無必要，不要戴有色眼鏡。
注意：
1．詞數(shù)：100左右；
2．適當增加細節(jié)使行文連貫；
3．開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
Dear Li Ming,
You’re very kind to care about your classmates.                                     
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Yours,
Dr. White

Answer 1

Dear Li Ming,
You’re very kind to care about your classmates. It is important for everyone to keep good eyesight. Now I will give you some advice on how to protect your eyesight.
To begin with, don't keep your eyes working for a long time. You'd better have a rest by looking in the long distance after you have studied an hour or so.
Then, pay attention to the following: Don't read in the sun or in a poor light; don't read in bed or in a moving bus. And when you read you should keep the book away from your eyes for about a foot.
Furthermore, do eye-exercises every day. It will also help you keep good eyesight.
And finally, you’d better not rub your eyes with your hands; and it is bad for your eyesight if you wear colored glasses.
I hope my advice will be helpful to you and your classmates.

試題分析：提綱作文要求考生根據(jù)所給的寫作要求和提綱，確定文章的中心思想，然后緊緊圍繞中心思想展開寫作。要求考生在保證內容要點全部概括的基礎上可以充分發(fā)揮自己的想象，進而用自己的語言來表達某種觀點或看法，增添了寫作的靈活性，同時能較好地考查考生的想象能力和英語語言表達能力。
點評：寫好提綱式作文的關鍵是認真審題和分析所給的提綱，因此考生首先要認真閱讀前面的提示，認清寫作要求和提綱之間的關系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱和時態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點，并以此為基礎充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運用英語知識，采用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當。語言力求準確、簡潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時應選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。考生必須認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等。