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20．假如你叫李華，你發(fā)現(xiàn)你的英國網(wǎng)友Lucy的生活方式不太健康．你想給她提些建議．請(qǐng)你用英語給她寫封電子郵件，內(nèi)容包括：
1．用水果代替零食；
2．用水代替飲料，多吃蔬菜；
3．減少使用電子產(chǎn)品的時(shí)間；
4．多運(yùn)動(dòng)；
5．按時(shí)作息．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右，短文的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．短文中不能出現(xiàn)與本人相關(guān)的信息．
Dear Lucy，
I hope everything goes well with you．Do you still stay up very late every night？I'm writing to share my ideas on how you can live a healthy life．
First of all，I think it's a good idea to eat more fruits instead of snacks．Also，you need to get rid of the habit of drinking cola only．Why not drink more water？If you spend less time on y our smart phone，you can have more time to get together with friends．（高分句型一）What's more，don't you think doing sports often can make you look well-built and feel energetic at the same time？（高分句型二）
All in all，a healthy life style makes us healthy，wealthy and wise in the future．（高分句型三）Hopefully you can follow my adv ice and make a change from now on．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假如你叫李華，你發(fā)現(xiàn)你的英國網(wǎng)友Lucy的生活方式不太健康．你想給她提些建議．請(qǐng)你用英語給她寫封電子郵件，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：用水果代替零食；用水代替飲料，多吃蔬菜；減少使用電子產(chǎn)品的時(shí)間；多運(yùn)動(dòng)；按時(shí)作息．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：go well （事情、工作、計(jì)劃）進(jìn)展順利；stay up 熬夜；first of all 首先；instead of 而不是；代替；get rid of 擺脫，除去；why not do…為什么不…（表建議）；What's more 此外；all in all 總而言之
Why not drink more water？If you spend less time on y our smart phone，you can have more time to get together with friends．（高分句型一）
What's more，don't you think doing sports often can make you look well-built and feel energetic at the same time？（高分句型二）
All in all，a  healthy life style makes us healthy，wealthy and wise in the future．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Lucy，
       I hope everything goes well with you．Do you still stay up very late every night？I'm writing to share my ideas on how you can live a healthy life．
       First of all，I think it's a good idea to eat more fruits instead of snacks．Also，you need to get rid of the habit of drinking cola only．Why not drink more water？If you spend less time on y our smart phone，you can have more time to get together with friends．（高分句型一）What's more，don't you think doing sports often can make you look well-built and feel energetic at the same time？（高分句型二）
       All in all，a  healthy life style makes us healthy，wealthy and wise in the future．（高分句型三）Hopefully you can follow my adv ice and make a change from now on．
                                                                                             Yours sincerely，
                                                                                              Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．