Question

書面表達（滿分25分）
假設你是高中生李華。最近，學生吃零食現(xiàn)象、體育活動后喝各種飲料來解渴非常普遍。請你就這一現(xiàn)象寫一封信，向校長反映這些問題，希望遏制這種情況。字數(shù)120字左右。
要求：1. 如實反映這些情況。
2. 表明由此引發(fā)的問題。
3. 提出你的建議。
注意：信的開頭、落款及信的第一句已給出（不計詞數(shù)）。
參考詞匯：零食 snacks
Dear Headmaster,
I’m writing to tell you about some problems happening on campus.
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Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Headmaster,
I’m writing to tell you about some problems happening on campus. It is common that students are accustomed to having snacks and a variety of drinks after having sports.
I’m worried that if students are addicted to snacks and drinks, it will do great harm to their health, for they are developing both in body and mind. So they need to take in all kinds of nutritions. However, sancks and drinks can’t meet their needs to grow up normally. On the other hand, it is easy for students to get into a bad habit of spending money in buying such kind of things, which is a waste of money.
In my opinion, students should have regular meals. Meanwhile, we can eat fruits and drink milk to make sure that we can develop healthily.
Thank you for your consideration.
Lihua

試題分析：考查應用文中的書信的寫作。要求向向校長反映學生吃零食現(xiàn)象、體育活動后喝各種飲料來解渴的情況。希望遏制這種情況。要點都已經(jīng)給出，信件要點包括：情況，問題，和你的建議，要求在提綱的基礎上進行拓展，豐富文章內容，審題時注意本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時，描述要盡量選擇簡潔的語言，運用合適的語法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點都準確表述出。難點在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運用高級詞匯和固定短語準確表述。象范文的it is easy for students to get into a bad habit of spending money in buying such kind of things, which is a waste of money.使用了it句型和非限制性定語從句,還要用適當?shù)倪B接詞被句子連接起來，象however, On the other hand,等詞，這樣文章顯得更連貫。
點評：書信類短文的關鍵在于要點要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。同時注意謀篇布局的順序，運用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時選擇高級的詞匯和語法項目讓文章更有文采。