Question

假如你叫李華，是新華中學(xué)高三的一名學(xué)生。5月，美國(guó)一中學(xué)組織部分學(xué)生到你校交流。Peter將在你家居住15天，作為東道主，你給Peter 發(fā)一封電子郵件， 內(nèi)容如下：
你的基本情況；
你的計(jì)劃安排；
征求對(duì)方的意見；
注意：1）詞數(shù)不少于80；
2）郵件開頭與結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總次數(shù)；
3）可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)；
Dear Peter,
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I am looking forward to getting your reply soon.
Yours,
LiHua

Answer 1

One possible version：
Dear Peter,
I am Lihua, studying in Senior 3 of Xinhua High School, which you will visit. I am very happy for your homestay.
I like science subjects very much, especially maths. But my spoken English is so poor that I can’t communicate with foreigners fluently. Thank God you will come to help me with this problem. By the way, NBA is my favourite, so whenever I am free, I do watch it on TV. If only I could watch a live game in the USA!
Here I’d like to make some arrangements for our stay. Besides your team’s activities, I will show you around our city., and on the weekend we will go to Confucius’ home for a visit to experience some Chinese culture.
Of course, that’s what I want to do during your stay. What’s your opinion?
I am looking forward to getting your reply soon.
Yours,
LiHua

試題分析：本文要求寫一封電子郵件，屬于應(yīng)用文的寫作范疇。郵件開頭結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，所以不需要注意格式要求，只需按照要求展開行文即可。本文需要包括的要點(diǎn)有：自己基本情況的介紹、Peter來家后的計(jì)劃安排和征求Peter建議三部分內(nèi)容。在寫作時(shí)要注意語言的簡(jiǎn)潔明了和禮貌委婉。為了語言的通順流暢，內(nèi)容的銜接和文章結(jié)構(gòu)層次的清晰需要恰當(dāng)使用連接詞和過渡句。此外本文可以使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來介紹自己的情況，使用一般將來時(shí)介紹自己的計(jì)劃安排等。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文要點(diǎn)全面，行文流暢自然。作者首先在開頭對(duì)Peter的即將到來表示歡迎，然后用三個(gè)段落分別介紹三個(gè)要點(diǎn)，即自我介紹，計(jì)劃安排和征求建議。在層次結(jié)構(gòu)上比較清晰，很好地完成了寫作任務(wù)。在句型結(jié)構(gòu)上，作者使用了讓步狀語從句whenever I am free, 表語從句that’s what I want to do during your stay.定語從句which you will visit. I am very happy for your homestay.等多種復(fù)合句和固定句式If only I could watch a live game in the USA!使文章句式多樣化，增添了文章的亮點(diǎn)。此外，作者在文中還使用了分詞短語studying in Senior 3 of Xinhua High School、介詞短語By the way等，這些都顯示了作者的較高水平的寫作能力。