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隨著科技的發(fā)展，手機擁有了越來越多的功能，人們因此在生活中越來越依賴于手機。但手機在為人們帶來便捷的同時也引發(fā)了很多問題。請寫一篇關于手機使用的文章，闡釋手機給人們生活帶來的利與弊（各兩點），提出你自己對手機使用的看法,并給出合理的建議。詞數(shù)100-120。

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With the rapid development of IT and information industry, there has been a dramatic rise in the cell phones, which are now essential to millions of people. But everything has two sides.
On one hand, cell phones contribute a lot to our daily life. Firstly, cell phones enable people to easily and quickly communicate with one another whenever and wherever you are. Secondly, it is the multifunction of cell phones that helps us survive those boring moments.
On the other hand, the disadvantages can never be denied. The most important disadvantage is the unknown effects on health in case of over-use. Furthermore, if people become too reliant on the use of cell phones，our face –to-face skills may decline.
From my perspective, any new invention has its drawbacks, but such negative aspects cannot always diminish its popularity. I strongly suggest that we use cell phones moderately and appropriately to make them more beneficial.

試題分析：本文是篇材料作文，在寫作之前認真審題，首先要注意內容要求，寫一篇關于手機使用的文章，闡釋手機給人們生活帶來的利與弊（各兩點），提出你自己對手機使用的看法,并給出合理的建議。詞數(shù)100-120。由此可知是議論文體，要用一般現(xiàn)在時。要點有三1.手機的優(yōu)點；2. 手機的缺點；3.個人觀點和建議。注意層次劃分和句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。字數(shù)也要注意。
【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的高級詞匯和短語為文章增色不少，比如essential，contribute a lot to，whenever and wherever you are，decline，drawbacks等等。同時還運用了 強調句式; which引導的非限制性定語從句等等。并注意了文章的層次和句子的銜接如：On one hand ，On the other hand，F(xiàn)urthermore, but等等。