Question

假定你是一名導(dǎo)游，你將接待一個(gè)外國(guó)旅游團(tuán)。請(qǐng)你擬訂一份120詞左右的導(dǎo)游詞向游客介紹青島。要點(diǎn)如下：
1. 青島市位于山東半島南端，面積10, 654平方公里，總?cè)丝?99萬(wàn)；
2. 青島三面環(huán)海，大海是青島的魅力所在；
3. 古代名人如李白、蒲松齡、康有為等的足跡遍布各地，留下了華美的詩(shī)文；
4. 青島是現(xiàn)代化城市，現(xiàn)代化的工廠和樓房林立。
參考詞匯：半島 peninsula
Ladies and gentlemen,
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Answer 1

Ladies and gentlemen,
Welcome to our city.
I'd like to tell you something about our city, Qingdao, which lies in the south of Shandong Peninsula. It covers an area of 10, 654 square kilometers and has a population of 6,990,000. When you come here, you will be attracted by the sea, which holds Qingdao in its arms. It is a beautiful world-famous city. Many ancient celebrities, such as Li Bai, Pu Songling, Kang Youwei have traveled to many of the places in Qingdao and have written beautiful poems and essays about their experiences. Besides, Qingdao is also a modern international city. It has many modern factories and tall buildings.
I'm sure you will have a good time here.
Thank you.

試題分析：考查提綱類作文，要求寫一篇關(guān)于向游客介紹青島的導(dǎo)游詞，要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給出，包括青島的面積，人口，地理位置，人文和現(xiàn)代的青島，要考生表達(dá)清楚，審題時(shí)注意本文使用的時(shí)態(tài)是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，運(yùn)用合適的語(yǔ)法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用省略句，倒裝句和強(qiáng)調(diào)句型準(zhǔn)確表述。如范文里面的When you come here, you will be attracted by the sea, which holds Qingdao in its arms.和It covers an area of 10, 654 square kilometers and has a population of 6,990,000.還有要用適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞把文章串聯(lián)起來(lái)：象such as，besides等等。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：提綱類短文的關(guān)鍵在于要點(diǎn)要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。同時(shí)注意謀篇布局的順序，詞匯句型的選用，運(yùn)用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時(shí)選擇高級(jí)的詞匯和語(yǔ)法項(xiàng)目讓文章更有文采。