Question

假設你叫張濤，你在北京的筆友李華生日即將到來。請你給他寫一封電子郵件，表示祝賀。郵件要包括以下要點：1.祝他生日晚會上玩得愉快； 2. 介紹你班上周日的爬山活動，并附幾張照片； 3. 詢問李華的學習情況。
注意：1.內容包括所有要點，但不要逐條翻譯；  2.可適當發(fā)揮，但行文連貫；3. 詞數(shù)100左右；開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Answer 1

Dear Li Hua,
Happy birthday ! I hope you’ll have a great birthday party and wish you all the best.
Last Sunday my class went to climb a mountain in the suburbs, where we had a wonderful time and enjoyed a relaxing spring day, It was like a rest from our busy school life. And it was a really unforgettable trip. Some photos taken that day will be attached to this email and please share my happiness.
How are things going with you, Li Hua? You have just started your school life in Senior 3. I think your school life is quite busy. Do you have so much pressure? I am  willing to offer you any help at any time if you need.
Please keep in close contact with me .
Yours,
Zhang Tao

試題分析：本文是一篇書信，實際上就是寫一封信。也是材料作文，你在北京的筆友李華生日即將到來。請你給他寫一封電子郵件，表示祝賀，要點都給出了，要表達清楚全面，本作文中給出的要點比較簡略,故需要充實文章內容，需要注意不要偏離文章中心。寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式。還要用適當?shù)年P聯(lián)詞把句子串聯(lián)起來，使文章更加連貫。平時除了加強詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。
【亮點說明】 因為是書信，這篇范文寫的比較簡潔，但是句式還是富有變化的，如：Last Sunday my class went to climb a mountain in the suburbs, where we had a wonderful time and enjoyed a relaxing spring day,這句話用了定語從句Some photos taken that day will be attached to this email and please share my happiness. 這句話用了過去分詞做定語，和be attached to這個詞組， I am  willing to offer you any help at any time if you need. 這句話用了詞組be willing to do和at any time。