Question

我校國(guó)際課程中心將組織一次由各班學(xué)生參加的“和平•友誼”冬令營(yíng)活動(dòng)，要求報(bào)名者提交英文個(gè)人簡(jiǎn)介。假設(shè)你是李萍，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列信息寫(xiě)一篇個(gè)人簡(jiǎn)介。

姓名：李萍         性別：女

年齡：16歲        學(xué)校：湖南光明中學(xué)

其他： 愛(ài)好音樂(lè)，攝影；善于與人交流，樂(lè)于助人；熱愛(ài)自然，熱愛(ài)和平

參加夏令營(yíng)的目的： 結(jié)交朋友，了解外國(guó)文化

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)120左右。

2. 可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

3. 參考詞匯   “ 和平•友誼” 冬令營(yíng)   Peace & Friendship Winter Camp

                                                                                     

                                                                                     

                                                                                     

                                                                                     

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

  I’m Li Ping, a girl of sixteen, presently attending Hunan Guangming Middle School. I like music, especially classical music. I’m also interested in photography because it allows me to record the beautiful moments in my life. Through my hobbies, I’ve made many friends. In fact, I like meeting new people and enjoy talking with them. Believing we all need help from each other, I appreciate friends’ help, and I’m willing to help anyone in need.

  I love life, Mother Nature as well as peace. I hate any form of violence.

  I would like to join the Peace & Friendship Winter Camp since it would be a great opportunity to make friends with young people from different countries and learn about their cultures.

【解析】

試題分析：題目要求寫(xiě)一篇個(gè)人簡(jiǎn)介。簡(jiǎn)介的內(nèi)容已經(jīng)列出，寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意介紹的先后順序，做到條理清晰。

題目給出的參考詞匯一定要用上。用第一人稱(chēng)進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作，不能出現(xiàn)標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)、單詞拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤；注意時(shí)態(tài)、

語(yǔ)法知識(shí)的正確運(yùn)用。

亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：范文使用了一些重要語(yǔ)法知識(shí)：原因狀語(yǔ)從句because it allows me to record the beautiful moments和since it would be a great opportunity to make friends；非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞Believing we all need help from each other，顯示了較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)法功底；

范文使用了較多的固定搭配：I’m also interested in；enjoy talking with them；I’m willing to；in need；I would like to；as well as；learn about等，使作文內(nèi)容充實(shí)，有說(shuō)服力；

范文使用了現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)I’ve made many friends；

范文注意使用especially, In fact等進(jìn)行強(qiáng)調(diào)和銜接上下文，做到了語(yǔ)意連貫。  

考點(diǎn)：材料類(lèi)作文