Question

假設(shè)美國(guó)某中學(xué)學(xué)習(xí)交流團(tuán)來你校開展聯(lián)誼活動(dòng)，學(xué)校指定你代表學(xué)生會(huì)在聯(lián)誼會(huì)上發(fā)
言。請(qǐng)你用英語(yǔ)寫一篇發(fā)言稿，簡(jiǎn)單介紹你校概況和豐富的校園生活，并希望聯(lián)誼活動(dòng)能加強(qiáng)友誼……
注意：
1．發(fā)言稿的開頭語(yǔ)已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)；
2.可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，但不要逐條翻譯；
3．詞數(shù)120左右。

Answer 1

A possible version：
Ladies and gentlemen,
I feel greatly honoured to be here with the guests from California , USA..Now allow me to express our warm welcome and sincere greetings to our American guests on behalf of the Student Union.
Here I’d like to make a brief introduce to our school. As you can see , our classrooms and science buildings are well equipped , with many trees and tall buildings around them .To make things better , our teachers are devoted and kind –hearted ，Whenever we meet with difficulties , they will come to our help .Besides , we students are all hard-working and always help each other , as if we were a big family.
We have a variety of after-class activities . In our Student Union , we have several , which are founded by students of similar interest . In a word , my school life is bringing me a lot . In the following days we will experience our colorful school life together and hopefully it will become an unforgettable memory in your life .
That’s all .Thank you .

試題分析：本文要求寫一篇發(fā)言稿。發(fā)言稿是為了說明一定的觀點(diǎn)態(tài)度或某一問題，有著不同的場(chǎng)合和不同的聽眾，所以語(yǔ)言要口語(yǔ)化，在情感上要具有說服力和感染力，語(yǔ)言上要做到生動(dòng)感人，盡量做到短而精。發(fā)言稿的結(jié)構(gòu)通常包括開場(chǎng)白，正文，結(jié)尾三部分，結(jié)尾時(shí)可以用感謝，展望，鼓舞等語(yǔ)句結(jié)尾，使演講給人留下深刻印象。本文應(yīng)包括兩個(gè)要點(diǎn)：一是介紹學(xué)校概況和豐富的校園生活，二是希望聯(lián)誼活動(dòng)能加強(qiáng)友誼。寫作時(shí)應(yīng)注意語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練，流暢，恰當(dāng)使用連接詞以使文章內(nèi)容銜接自然。盡量使用多種句式，比如定語(yǔ)從句，狀語(yǔ)從句，感嘆句，祈使句等，以增加文章亮點(diǎn)。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本篇范文采用了經(jīng)典的三段式結(jié)構(gòu)，首段是開場(chǎng)白；中間是正文部分，介紹了自己學(xué)校優(yōu)美的環(huán)境，完善的教學(xué)設(shè)施以及師生的和諧勤奮；末尾提出自己的希望和祝愿，結(jié)構(gòu)上符合演講稿的寫作要求。在文中作者用As you can see使語(yǔ)言比較口語(yǔ)化，聽起來親切自然，拉近了和聽眾的距離。此外，作者還使用了多種句式，比如狀語(yǔ)從句.Whenever we meet with difficulties , they will come to our help；并列句In the following days we will experience our colorful school life together and hopefully it will become an unforgettable memory in your life，和with many trees and tall buildings around them ，to make things better ，In a word 等一些短語(yǔ)，使句子長(zhǎng)短結(jié)合，抑揚(yáng)頓挫，增強(qiáng)了語(yǔ)言的感染力，總之這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的范文。