Question

假如你是李華。你的朋友Mike 染上了煙癮，請(qǐng)你寫一封信說(shuō)服他戒煙。
要點(diǎn)如下:

吸煙的危害	1. 危害自身和他人健康
	2. 污染空氣
	3. 其它原因
戒煙方法	1. 遠(yuǎn)離吸煙者
	2. 逐漸減少吸煙量
	3. 其它方法

 
詞數(shù)：100-120 左右，信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出。
Dear Mike,
Recently I have noticed that you are addicted to smoking. 
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Quitting smoking is not as hard as you think. If you keep trying you will succeed.
Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Recently I have noticed that you are addicted to smoking. Whenever you start smoking, the room is filled with a terrible smell. By no means should you go on with this addiction.
For one thing, smoking does great harm to you and your family, increasing the risk of cancer. In fact, second-hand smoker may suffer more than the smokers themselves. For another, smoking not only pollutes air, but also wastes money.
It is high time that you quitted smoking. To begin with, you should stay away from smoking triggers and always keep yourself busy. At the same time, you are supposed to develop more interests to distract yourself, but don’t expect to break the addiction right away. It is advisable to cut down on it gradually.
Quitting smoking is not as hard as you think. If you keep trying, you will succeed.

試題分析：書信是同學(xué)們比較熟悉的寫作體裁，而且開頭結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，同學(xué)們只需用通順的語(yǔ)言表述清所要求的要點(diǎn)即可。首先在文章開頭要提出寫信的目的，即勸Mike戒煙。根據(jù)提示信息，文章可以使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，內(nèi)容應(yīng)該包括吸煙的危害和戒煙的方法兩大主要內(nèi)容。在列舉危害和戒煙的方法時(shí)要注意使用表順序的連接詞，比如first 、second、third或者on the one hand 、on the other hand等，這樣會(huì)使文章條理性更強(qiáng)。此外，在遣詞造句上，應(yīng)多用一些高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，如定語(yǔ)從句、倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞等，以提高文章的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】在文章第一段作者提出自己反對(duì)Mike吸煙，然后第二段講述吸煙的危害，第三段介紹戒煙的方法，最后鼓勵(lì)Mike，希望他戒煙成功。文章要點(diǎn)齊全，語(yǔ)言通順，很好地完成了寫作任務(wù)。for one thing，for another thing，to begin with，at the same time等短語(yǔ)的使用也使文章層次清晰，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。此外，文中出現(xiàn)的固定句型it is high time that…..,條件狀語(yǔ)從句If you keep trying, you will succeed.，倒裝句By no means should you go on with this addiction.等也使文章亮點(diǎn)紛呈。