Question

假如你是高三學(xué)生黎明，代表高三學(xué)生在畢業(yè)典禮上進(jìn)行畢業(yè)演講。
請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文，內(nèi)容包括。
(1)對(duì)獲得的幫助表示感謝：  (2)消除與同學(xué)之間的誤會(huì)：  (3)努力學(xué)習(xí)，實(shí)現(xiàn)人生
夢(mèng)想：(4)對(duì)學(xué)弟、學(xué)妹的建議。
注意：(l)可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫：  (2)詞數(shù)：100左右（開(kāi)頭己給出，不計(jì)
入總詞數(shù)）。
Hello, everybody
I am greatly honored to be here, representing all of my fellow senior three classmates to
give a speech.
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Answer 1

Hello, everybody
I am greatly honored to be here, representing all of my fellow senior three classmates to give a speech.
Now, I have much to share with my fellow students. Firstly, I would like to show my appreciation to those standing by me all the way, teachers and friends included. Without their help and advice my life would be different. Secondly, it’s high time to say sorry to classmates whom I hurt or misunderstood. Communication and smiles act as bridges to friendship. Thirdly, I have made up my mind to make every effort to study, for I believe hard work is the key to success. Just as the old saying goes, “no pains, no gains”. Finally, I hope that all the younger fellows can make full use of time, because time and tide wait for no men.

試題分析：這是一篇演講稿，屬于提綱類(lèi)作文。人稱(chēng)應(yīng)使用第一人稱(chēng)。時(shí)態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。文章首句已寫(xiě)好，文中給出的要點(diǎn)比較具體,故需要準(zhǔn)確表達(dá).可以用一些表示并列的詞或遞進(jìn)的詞進(jìn)行連接。如：First of all，Secondly， What’s more等詞。其中“(4)對(duì)學(xué)弟、學(xué)妹的建議”部分，需要自己發(fā)揮，寫(xiě)出一、二點(diǎn)建議即可。屬于半開(kāi)放型作文。同樣可用一些詞進(jìn)行層次連接注意演講稿的格式及稱(chēng)呼語(yǔ)，寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次，特別注意在選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】(1)使用一些如Firstly，Secondly，thirdly ，finally等承接詞進(jìn)行連接,層次清晰。(2)使用了一些高級(jí)句型，如it’s high time to。。。，及虛擬語(yǔ)氣的運(yùn)用Without their help and advice my life would be different.(3)諺語(yǔ)、名言的運(yùn)用，如：as the old saying goes, “no pains, no gains”,”time and tide wait for no men”(4)高級(jí)詞匯及短語(yǔ)的使用，如make up one’s mind,make every effort，make full use of 等.