Question

假如你是高中生李華，請根據(jù)以下要點，以日記的形式，敘述你在5月15日（周六）參加在鄉(xiāng)下草莓采摘節(jié)（Strawberry-picking Festival）的活動情況。
你到達草莓園的方式，時間，及當(dāng)時的天氣狀況；
你在草莓采摘節(jié)的所見所聞。
注意：日記格式已給出；詞數(shù)120左右；可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫
Saturday, May15                                               Sunny
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Answer 1

Today, a sunny day, Li Ming and I went to the countryside by bus to attend the Strawberry-picking Festival, which started at 8 o”clock in the morning.
When the organizer announced the rules of the festival, we were led into the strawberry garden by beautiful girls in red, group by group. While walking along the country road, we saw the beautiful flowers and heard the birds singing. The air was much fresher and cleaner than that in the city we are living in. During the festival, we enjoyed sweet strawberries, watched some exciting performances and learned many stories about the town and its kind people. At about five in the afternoon, we had to say goodbye to the garden and went back home. Both Li Ming and I enjoyed ourselves and hoped to visit the again soon.
What an unforgettable day!

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，我們需要用正確的英語把給出的要點表達出來.本作文中給出的要點不是很具體,故需要考生進行擴展，并準確表達.寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時要賦予變化。Li Ming and I went to the countryside by bus to attend the Strawberry-picking Festival, which started at 8 o”clock in the morning.這句話用了非限制性定語從句，While walking along the country road, we saw the beautiful flowers and heard the birds singing.這是狀語從句的省略式，
點評：本文屬于提綱類作文，動筆前，一定要認真分析要點，理解要點要表達的含義，不能遺漏要點，跑題偏題。平時除了加強詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。