Question

從南京“彭宇案”開始，社會(huì)就陷入“助人恐懼”中，最近，你們班就“是否應(yīng)該幫助陌生人”展開了討論，同學(xué)們就這一話題意見不一，你的看法如何？你認(rèn)為怎樣才能讓愛心回歸社會(huì)，建立人與人之間的信任？請根據(jù)討論結(jié)果，以“Should We Help Strangers?” 為題寫一篇短文

	原因
贊成	幫助他人是美德……； 幫助他人就是幫助自己……； ……
反對	怕陷入麻煩，甚至危險(xiǎn)； 怕被誤解； ……
你的觀點(diǎn)？(至少兩點(diǎn))

注意： 1.詞數(shù)150左右；                 2.開頭已寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；

3.覆蓋所有要點(diǎn)，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；       4.文稿中不得提及考生所在學(xué)校及本人姓名。     

參考詞匯： 美德  virtue

Should  We  Help  Strangers?

We used to appreciate those who like to help strangers. But nowadays people tend to be very cautious of helping strangers. Recently our class had a discussion about whether we should help strangers.

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Answer 1

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One possible version：

Should We Help Strangers?

We used to appreciate those who like to help strangers. But nowadays people tend to be very cautious of helping strangers. Recently our class had a discussion about whether we should help strangers. Opinions are divided on this topic.

Some think we should try to help others whether they are strangers or not. Helping others is a virtue, and it will make our society more harmonious. Besides, to some extent, helping others is helping oneself. We may come across some trouble and need others' help some day. If everyone turns a blind eye to our trouble and turns a deaf ear to our appeal for aid just because we are strangers to them, it’s hard to imagine what our world will be like.

However, others are afraid that helping others can sometimes bring us trouble or even put us in danger. Sometimes we are just misunderstood and thus have to pay the cost of kindness.

In my opinion, we should try our best to help others when they are in need of help, but we should also protect ourselves to avoid getting into trouble. Only if everyone tries a little kindness, will society be full of love and trust be established between people.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一篇對比觀點(diǎn)的文章， 這種文章應(yīng)該首先敘述討論的事件，也就是背景，然后論述兩個(gè)不同的觀點(diǎn)并給出自己的看法。按照提示信息本篇書面表達(dá)應(yīng)該分為三個(gè)方面，即：支持的觀點(diǎn)；反對的觀點(diǎn)和自己的觀點(diǎn)。可能用到的句型Some people say ……；While others think that ……；From my point of view, I think……。在列舉贊同或者反對的理由時(shí)要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，比如on the one hand ；on the other hand；what’s more；moreover；firstly；secondly 等以使文章層次清晰，有較強(qiáng)的邏輯性。此外，要注意規(guī)范拼寫和標(biāo)點(diǎn)也是語言準(zhǔn)確性的一個(gè)方面。在遣詞造句上，應(yīng)多使用一些高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，如定語從句、倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)、非謂語動(dòng)詞等以提高文章檔次。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文開頭講述所討論的事件：我們是否要幫助陌生人，然后分三段分別講述贊同的觀點(diǎn)，反對的觀點(diǎn)和自己的觀點(diǎn)。在講述這三個(gè)要點(diǎn)時(shí)作者分別用Opinions are divided on this topic，however和 in my opinion來承接上下文，使文章過渡自然，結(jié)構(gòu)分明，脈絡(luò)清晰。作者在本文中也應(yīng)用了較多的句型結(jié)構(gòu)和高級(jí)詞匯，比如be cautious of、harmonious、appeal for、establish、倒裝句Only if everyone tries a little kindness, will society be full of love and trust be established between people，狀語從句If everyone turns a blind eye to our trouble and turns a deaf ear to our appeal for aid just because we are strangers to them等，這些都顯示了作者深厚的語言功底，總之，這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的范文。

考點(diǎn)：考查提綱作文。