Question

青少年學(xué)生的安全備受社會(huì)關(guān)注。在全國(guó)中小學(xué)安全教育宣傳日來(lái)臨之際, 《21世紀(jì)英文報(bào)》請(qǐng)你以“How to Keep Us Safe” 為題，寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文，談一談青少年學(xué)生應(yīng)該如何保障自身的安全。
提示：(1) What should you do at home?
(2) What should you do on the way to school?
(3) What should you do at school?
要求：(1) 短文須包括所有提示內(nèi)容，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。
(2) 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名、校名和地名。
(3) 詞數(shù)：60～80個(gè)。（短文開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）
How to Keep Us Safe
Safety is important to us all. As teenagers, we must learn to protect ourselves. ________________________
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                

Answer 1

Let’s take good care of ourselves to keep happy and safe. 
One possible version:
How to Keep Us Safe
Safety is important to us all. As teenagers, we must learn to protect ourselves. 
When we stay at home, we should be careful with the electricity and the gas. Do remember to turn them off after using them. We’d better not play with fire or knives. They may hurt us.
On the way to school, it’s important for us to obey the traffic rules. If we go to school by bike, we should never ride too fast. It’s dangerous.
What about at school? We should pay more attention to doing sports safely. We also mustn’t run after each other after class.
Let’s take good care of ourselves to keep happy and safe.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，而且提供材料充分詳細(xì)。我們要做的就是用地道且完美的語(yǔ)句將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。根據(jù)寫作的基本步驟，在認(rèn)真詳細(xì)審題的審題之后。先在心中打好腹稿，確定本文的人稱（根據(jù)問(wèn)題要求，應(yīng)為第一人稱），時(shí)態(tài)（現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主），要點(diǎn)（共三個(gè)必寫要點(diǎn)），然后再動(dòng)筆。在不遺漏要點(diǎn)的基礎(chǔ)上，適當(dāng)加以發(fā)揮和選取精美的結(jié)構(gòu)和語(yǔ)句。根據(jù)材料提供的內(nèi)容可知，由于本文屬于一篇敘述加說(shuō)明性文章，應(yīng)選取一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱采用第一人稱來(lái)陳述和說(shuō)明。在寫作中注意開頭和結(jié)尾的設(shè)計(jì)。不同信息之間應(yīng)采用合適的連詞，保證文章渾然一體，可讀性強(qiáng)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇文章在開篇使用了be important to sb, us all, 以及l(fā)earn to do，使讀者感到作者的語(yǔ)言功底還是很深的。在中間段落關(guān)于如何保持安全的說(shuō)明中，作者先后運(yùn)用了強(qiáng)調(diào)結(jié)構(gòu)Do remember to turn them off after using them，形式主語(yǔ)it’s important for us to obey the traffic rules.條件狀語(yǔ)從句If we go to school by bike, we should never ride too fast.看出作者思路的清晰以及靈活自如地去組織語(yǔ)言的能力。最后一段言簡(jiǎn)意賅發(fā)出號(hào)召，意味深長(zhǎng)�？梢姡�在平時(shí)的日常學(xué)習(xí)中，注意總結(jié)和扎實(shí)基本功對(duì)寫作是至關(guān)重要的。