Question

書面表達(dá)（本題10分）
朋友是人生中不可或缺的一部分，你一定也有好朋友吧？請(qǐng)以“My friend and I”為題，寫一篇不少于80字的小短文。最好能用上關(guān)于朋友的諺語(yǔ)。

Name	Linda	I
Age	15	15
Personality（個(gè)性）	serious	outgoing
Opinions on TV shows	likes sitcoms	can’t stand action movies
Resolutions ways	to be a teacher study hard get good grade	to be a reporter read more keep on writing articles

Answer 1

My friend and I
My best friend, Linda, is the same age as me.
In some ways, we look the same, but in other ways, we look different. For instance, she is serious. However, I’m opposite,I’m outgoing.I like making a lot of friends.Linda likes sitcoms.Maybe that’s because of her personality.
As for me,I can’t stand action movies. I think they are too exciting.When watching them, I feel my heart nearly jumping out of my chest.When talking about future, she says she is going to be a teacher. And in order to achieve her dream,she is going to study hard to get good grade.But for me,I am going to be a reporter so I will read more
And keep on writing articles.
Although we have so many differences, I regard her as my closest sister, that’s because whenever I meet any difficulty, she’ll try her best to help me out. A the saying goes,”A friend in need is a friend indeed.” I know its real meaning from her—my best friend,Linda.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，而且提供材料充分詳細(xì)。我們要做的就是用地道且完美的語(yǔ)句將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。根據(jù)寫作的基本步驟，在認(rèn)真詳細(xì)審題的審題之后。先在心中打好腹稿，確定本文的人稱，時(shí)態(tài)，要點(diǎn)，然后再動(dòng)筆。在不遺漏要點(diǎn)的基礎(chǔ)上，適當(dāng)加以發(fā)揮和選取精美的結(jié)構(gòu)和語(yǔ)句。根據(jù)材料提供的內(nèi)容可知，由于本文屬于一篇對(duì)比性較強(qiáng)的文章所以采取對(duì)比描寫的方式更能體現(xiàn)雙方的不同之處，更能為下文體現(xiàn)真正朋友做鋪墊。在寫作中作者注意了開頭和結(jié)尾的設(shè)計(jì)。不同事件之間應(yīng)采用合適的連詞，保證文章渾然一體，可讀性強(qiáng)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇文章在開篇使用了同位語(yǔ)Linda及the same as結(jié)構(gòu)，使文章開頭簡(jiǎn)潔有力。在第二段又采用了In some ways, we look the same, but in other ways, we look different.承上啟下做的很好。For instance的使用使下文的介紹順暢自然。加之a(chǎn)s for ，that’s because of, when doing ,in order to achieve her dream等等一系列結(jié)構(gòu)的運(yùn)用使文章可讀性強(qiáng)。When watching them, I feel my heart nearly jumping out of my chest.When talking about future, she says she is going to be a teacher. 兩句中When doing結(jié)構(gòu)的運(yùn)用，都直接體現(xiàn)了作者的組織運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力很強(qiáng)。而文章結(jié)尾一段朋友和我之間感情的升華，雖然我們有許多不同之處但我仍把她視為最親的朋友。因?yàn)闊o(wú)論何時(shí)何地有困難她都盡力幫助我，更體現(xiàn)作者在平時(shí)的日常學(xué)習(xí)中，十分注意總結(jié)和扎實(shí)基本功，這些對(duì)寫作都是至關(guān)重要的。