Question

上周的班會(huì)課上，九年級(jí)的學(xué)生就看電視展開(kāi)了激烈的辯論。Daniel記錄了班上學(xué)生的一些主要看法。請(qǐng)幫他用英語(yǔ)表達(dá)學(xué)生的主要觀點(diǎn)，并談?wù)勛约旱目捶ā?br />好處：1.看電視幫我們更多地了解世界，從中學(xué)習(xí)到很多有用的知識(shí)。
2.它有助于我們放松并使我們的生活更有趣。各種各樣精彩的節(jié)目老少皆宜。
不足：3.看太多電視對(duì)我們的眼睛有害。一些學(xué)生每天看電視超過(guò)四個(gè)小時(shí)。
4.大量的學(xué)生著迷于他們最喜歡的節(jié)目。結(jié)果沒(méi)有足夠的時(shí)間完成家作。
我認(rèn)為5.……(2-3句)
注意：
1. 第5要點(diǎn)的內(nèi)容須用2～3句話作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2. 短文須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，要求語(yǔ)句通順、意思連貫；
3. 詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右，短文的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾句已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。                                                      
I am David, a Grade 9 student. We had a discussion about watching TV . We think watching TV has a lot of advantages and disadvantages.                                                                    
                                                                                                                                                                     
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                                                                                                          

Answer 1

I am David, a Grade 9 student. We had a discussion about watching TV. We think watching TV has a lot of advantages and disadvantages. Watching TV helps us learn more about the world. We can learn a lot of useful knowledge. It can help us relax and make our lives more interesting. All kinds of wonderful programmes are suitable for all ages. But watching too much TV is bad for our eyes. Some students watch TV more than four hours every day. Plenty of students are crazy about their favourite programmes. As a result, they don’t have enough time to finish their homework. I think students shouldn’t watch too much TV. They should achieve a balance between their study and TV. They can watch TV for one or two hours at the weekend.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。本文要求按照所給的提示內(nèi)容完成這篇表達(dá)個(gè)人看法的作文，我們要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z(yǔ)言把所列舉的內(nèi)容準(zhǔn)確地表達(dá)出來(lái)。寫作中要包含看電視的好處、不足以及習(xí)作者自己的看法等，關(guān)鍵要適當(dāng)發(fā)揮表達(dá)出自己的觀點(diǎn)等。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱主要是第一、三人稱，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫作中注意上下文的過(guò)度，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】 這篇短文簡(jiǎn)明、扼要地闡明了班會(huì)課上討論的對(duì)看電視的看法，并包含了文中所要求的全部信息，同時(shí)也表達(dá)出了自己的觀點(diǎn)。其中使用了一些固定句式和短語(yǔ)，包含動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)做主語(yǔ)的準(zhǔn)確使用為文章增色不少.如 help us relax and make our lives more interesting，more than four hours，are crazy about， watching too much TV is bad for our eyes， achieve a balance between their study and TV.學(xué)習(xí)中再注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理。