Question

假如你們班要舉行以“Caring about health”為題的主題班會，請根據以下內容提示，并結合自己的親身體會，寫一篇80詞左右的英語發(fā)言稿，談談你的看法。開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數。
保持健康的意義；
自己以前身體很虛弱，經常生病不能上學；
現在通過鍛煉，身體變得強壯有力；
保持健康的方法：多吃水果蔬菜；每天鍛煉一小時；早睡早起；勤洗手。
Caring about health
Boys and girls，
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Thank you

Answer 1

Caring about health
Boys and girls，
Health is the most important thing to everybody; wealth is the most valuable treasure to everybody. Without health,we can have nothing to talk about.
Looking back on my past, I was in poor health for about two years. My life was in the darkness. Sometimes I was too seriously ill to go to school. I could just play games for at most ten minutes. After that, I was told to exercise as much as possible in order to be in good health . It  really works. Now, I’m strong and powerful.
How to be healthy? There’s no secret. But first of all, you must eat more vegetables and do sports about at least one hour every day. At the same time ,you should go to bed early and sleep early. Last but not least, don’t forget to wash hands often, before eating, after going to the restroom …
Please remember my tips, then you will live a healthy life!
Thanks for your listening.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文。形式上是一篇發(fā)言稿，但開頭和結尾已經給出，不是障礙。另外，本文所給材料比較明確，我們要做的就是用正確的英語把這些內容表達。根據材料內容可知本文主語是第一人稱，在寫作時注意時態(tài)及主謂一致問題，因為本文有對過去的回顧及與現在的對比。同時，寫作中適當使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關系，是文章錦上添花也是必不可少的。
【亮點說明】這篇短文使用了大量的連詞，使文章結構緊湊，開篇一段三句話道出了健康的重要性，前兩句Health is the most important thing to everybody; wealth is the most valuable treasure to everybody.排比，言簡有力。第二段分詞短語作狀語開頭，新鮮有力，吸引讀者眼球，一些不常用詞或短語looking back on my past, at most, seriously, in order to, works,使文章增色不少。尾端也是娓娓道來，At the same time， Last but not least, 使所敘語言如小河流水，不急不緩，順理成章�？傊�，本文在語言表達上不失為一篇邏輯性和條理性都很強的一篇好文章.