Question

Write a passage on “A letter to my headmaster/headmistress ” in at least 60 words according to the given situation (以“給校長(zhǎng)的一封信”為題，寫一篇不少于60詞的文章。)
提示：初中學(xué)習(xí)階段肯定給你留下許多的回憶。有甜美，有苦澀，這些都是寶貴的人生經(jīng)歷。在即將告別你的初中生活，請(qǐng)你以Susan的名義給你的校長(zhǎng)寫一封信，分享一件讓你最難忘的校園活動(dòng)以及提出一個(gè)你最希望學(xué)校改進(jìn)的方面。
（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何人名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分。）

Answer 1

A letter to my headmaster
Dear Mr. Headmaster,
How time flies！I’m going to leave this school. In this school I had a lot of great time. But what I won’t forget is the basketball match held one year ago. It was between Grade 8 students and Grade 9 students. During the match, the players played very hard. To our surprise, Grade 8 students won. Grade 9 students also felt happy for them and said “Congratulations!” to them. They became good friends.
Well, sports are very important for us young students. We can learn to work together and make good friends. But I think our school needs to build a new sports area. It should have a soccer section, a basketball section, and a ping-pong section. I believe such facilities will meet our sporting needs.
Thank you for your reading this letter.
Yours faithfully,
Susan

試題分析：這篇短文要求我們以A letter to my headmaster為題寫一篇作文，即給校長(zhǎng)的一封信。在題目中給了我們這篇短文的重點(diǎn)內(nèi)容。一是分享一件讓你最難忘的校園活動(dòng)，比如一次籃球比賽；二是提出一個(gè)你最希望學(xué)校改進(jìn)的方面，如比賽場(chǎng)地可以更加專業(yè)化，分出籃球區(qū)、足球區(qū)、乒乓球區(qū)等。重點(diǎn)內(nèi)容雖然已經(jīng)給了我們，但是很多內(nèi)容都需要我們自己去完成，讓它變得完整、合理，內(nèi)容豐富，這就需要花費(fèi)我們的想象力，以及我們平時(shí)積累的知識(shí)。另外，寫作時(shí)，還需注意語(yǔ)句間的銜接，使文意連貫，表達(dá)流暢。最重要的一點(diǎn)要注意敘述那件難忘的活動(dòng)時(shí)，要用一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)；你希望學(xué)校改進(jìn)的地方可以用將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)或者是現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)的適當(dāng)句型來(lái)表達(dá)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇比較不錯(cuò)的作文。作者首先寫了一次難忘的籃球比賽，然后向校長(zhǎng)提出一個(gè)建議。從整篇來(lái)看，層次清晰，內(nèi)容完整。短文中有些內(nèi)容完成不錯(cuò)。如Grade 9 students also felt happy for them and said “Congratulations!” to them. They became good friends.等。這些內(nèi)容都比較貼合文章的需要，意思也很連貫。文章中還用了一些比較好的句型，如How time flies！I believe such facilities will meet our sporting needs.等。