Question

根據(jù)下面表格的提示，寫一篇如何保護(hù)我們的環(huán)境（How to protect our environment/earth?）的短文,不少于90詞左右（15分）

人類的 不明智 之舉	1.亂伐樹林 2.亂扔垃圾 3.不加處理排放廢物
導(dǎo)致的 問題	1.土地沙化 2.河水變臟 3.空氣質(zhì)量差 4.全球氣溫升高
建議	至少兩條合理化建議

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Answer 1

How to protect our environment?
As time goes by, man is making the earth sick. People cut down too many trees and throw rubbish away here and there. Many factories pour waste water into rivers and lakes. As a result, a lot of rich land has changed into desert, leaving only sand. Many rivers and lakes are dead now. The air is becoming dirtier and dirtier. The temperature on the earth becomes higher and higher. Many people now are in bad health. I think everyone is supposed to reduce the waste. Recycling can not only protect the environment but also save money. We’d better not buy bottles or boxes which people can use only once. If we are greener people, our world will become more and more beautiful.

試題分析：這篇短文要求我們以怎樣保護(hù)地球或環(huán)境為題，寫一篇作文。在題目中給出了我們這篇作文的要點(diǎn)，主要包括三部分，一是目前人們的一些不明智的做法，這里面主要有三點(diǎn)，亂伐樹林，亂扔垃圾，排放廢物；第二部分是導(dǎo)致的問題，包括土地沙化，河水變臟，空氣質(zhì)量差和全球氣溫升高。第三部分是你給出的建議，這一部分是自己根據(jù)自己的觀點(diǎn)隨意發(fā)揮的。寫作時(shí)注意使用正確的英語句式和短語，并且注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，同時(shí)還要注意層次分明。多使用好的句式和短語，使文章表達(dá)流暢，意思連貫。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。這篇作文內(nèi)容完整，意思連貫，層次分明，語言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，觀點(diǎn)鮮明。將題目中所給的內(nèi)容加上自己的看法，完整的表達(dá)了出來。首先作者先介紹了人們的一些錯(cuò)誤的做法，這部分里較好的句式有As time goes by、throw rubbish away here and there等。接下來作者寫的是人們這樣做帶來的后果，As a result, a lot of rich land has changed into desert, leaving only sand、The air is becoming dirtier and dirtier。最后，也是這篇短文的中心部分，作者給出了自己的建議，這些建議非常合理，也很切題。這里面較好的句式有I think everyone is supposed to reduce the waste、If we are greener people, our world will become more and more beautiful等。