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假如你是班長(zhǎng)，學(xué)期結(jié)束時(shí)你要給同學(xué)作簡(jiǎn)短的評(píng)價(jià)。你班的李華這個(gè)學(xué)期變化很大，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)提示寫(xiě)一篇簡(jiǎn)評(píng)。

過(guò)去	功課不好，常與同學(xué)爭(zhēng)吵，垃圾被他撒的滿(mǎn)地都是，課桌總是一團(tuán)糟。
現(xiàn)在	自從老師和他溝通后，有了很大變化。（學(xué)習(xí)、與同學(xué)相處、生活……）
結(jié)果	父母、老師對(duì)他很滿(mǎn)意。
希望	在即將到來(lái)的考試中取得好成績(jī)。

 
注意：
短文須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，要求語(yǔ)句通順、意思連貫；
括號(hào)部分須用3、4句話(huà)展開(kāi)合理想象，作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右，短文開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Answer 1

Li Hua has improved a lot this term. In the past he didn’t do well in his subjects. He often quarreled with his classmates. Rubbish was spread all over the floor by him. His desk was always in a mess. He has changed a lot since the teacher had communication with him. Now he works hard at his lessons. He gets along well with his classmates. He often sweeps the floor. His parents and teachers are satisfied with him. I hope he will get good grades in the coming exam. (82 words)

試題分析：本題要求寫(xiě)一篇給同學(xué)作的評(píng)價(jià)。本文所給材料比較詳細(xì)。寫(xiě)作中注意將李華過(guò)去和現(xiàn)在的一些情況介紹清楚，并描述自己對(duì)他將來(lái)的希望。結(jié)合材料可知本文時(shí)態(tài)人稱(chēng)問(wèn)題比較復(fù)雜，涉及過(guò)去，現(xiàn)在和將來(lái)三種時(shí)態(tài)，注意時(shí)態(tài)與時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配問(wèn)題及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫(xiě)作中注意使用連詞，序數(shù)詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。最后，注意不要犯語(yǔ)法、句法以及搭配性錯(cuò)誤，寫(xiě)好后反復(fù)讀幾遍，適當(dāng)修改。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：此類(lèi)作文首先要做的就是認(rèn)真閱讀材料，不能跑題偏題。寫(xiě)作中注意一些基礎(chǔ)的寫(xiě)作常識(shí)，不犯低級(jí)錯(cuò)誤。只要平時(shí)積累足夠，就一定能獲得滿(mǎn)意的分?jǐn)?shù)。另外為了應(yīng)付考試，可以有選擇的背誦一些范文，這樣應(yīng)考時(shí)就會(huì)有法可依。