Question

【題目】請(qǐng)認(rèn)真閱讀下面有關(guān)某校學(xué)生父母教育方式現(xiàn)狀的網(wǎng)絡(luò)調(diào)查的餅狀圖及相關(guān)文字，并按照要求用英語(yǔ)寫一篇150詞左右的文章。

（寫作內(nèi)容）

1. 用約30個(gè)詞概括上述信息的主要內(nèi)容；

2. 簡(jiǎn)要談?wù)劯改附逃�方式的重要性�?/span>

3. 談?wù)勀憷硐胫械母改附逃�方式。（上述�?duì)話僅供參考）

（寫作要求）

1. 寫作過(guò)程中不能直接引用原文語(yǔ)句；

2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

3. 不必寫標(biāo)題。

（評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)）

內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，語(yǔ)篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。

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Answer 1

【答案】Most of the students enjoy a harmonious family atmosphere with equal treatment. However, about 16% of the parents expect too much of their children and some are even hard on them.

The importance of family education cannot be stressed too much. It’s well known that the family is a person’s first school, where parents are the first teachers. Proper family education is always in the fundamental position, which plays a very important role in shaping a child’s growth and development.

In my opinion, the ideal family educational mode should be the one that adopts the scientific method of encouragement, guidance, and tolerance. Parents should pay great attention to emotional communication by sparing time to talk with children, listen attentively to their aspirations and give them encouragement. Only in this way can children build self-respect and self-confidence and develop their physical and mental health.

【解析】

本篇書面表達(dá)屬于圖表作文，餅狀圖展示出某校學(xué)生父母教育方式現(xiàn)狀的網(wǎng)絡(luò)調(diào)查，以及一部分相關(guān)文字，要求考生寫一篇文章概括上述信息的主要內(nèi)容，簡(jiǎn)要談?wù)劯改附逃�方式的重要性及考生理想中的父母教育方式�?/span>

第一步：審題

時(shí)態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。

要求：1. 用約30個(gè)詞概括上述信息的主要內(nèi)容；2. 簡(jiǎn)要談?wù)劯改附逃�方式的重要性�?/span>3.談?wù)勀憷硐胫械母改附逃�方式�?/span>

注意：1. 寫作過(guò)程中不能直接引用原文語(yǔ)句；2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；3.不必寫標(biāo)題。

分析圖表：本篇書面表達(dá)旨在要求考生準(zhǔn)確理解并闡述一個(gè)被分割成大小不等切片的餅狀圖所傳達(dá)的信息。考生應(yīng)清楚掌握部分與整體，部分與部分之間的相互關(guān)系，這種關(guān)系通常是以百分比的數(shù)字形式給出的。餅狀圖反映了某校學(xué)生父母教育方式現(xiàn)狀調(diào)查結(jié)果，從餅狀圖中我們可以看出和諧相處的占比39%，平等對(duì)待的占比31%，過(guò)高期望的占比16%，苛刻要求的占比11%，其他的占比3%，可以得出結(jié)論，大多數(shù)學(xué)生享有平等待遇的和諧家庭氣氛。然而，約有16%的家長(zhǎng)對(duì)孩子期望過(guò)高，有些甚至對(duì)他們很苛刻。考生需要用約30個(gè)詞概括上述信息的主要內(nèi)容。

第二步：列提綱（重點(diǎn)詞組及圖表類作文常用表達(dá)）

重點(diǎn)詞組

harmonious; atmosphere; equal treatment; expect; be hard on sb.; be well known; proper family education; fundamental; play a very important role in doing sth.; growth; in one’s opinion; ideal; educational mode; adopt; scientific; guidance; tolerance; pay attention to; emotional communication; spare time to do; talk with sb.; attentively; aspiration; build self-respect; self-confidence; develop one’s physical and mental health

圖表類作文常用表達(dá)

1. 數(shù)據(jù)分析常用：

（1）the number of...is more than/over...

（2）the amount of...increases/grows/rises/goes up to.../by...

（3）the number of...is similar to/almost the same as/smaller than/below...

（4）the amount of...is quite different from.../decreases/falls/drops from...to...

2. 結(jié)論或預(yù)測(cè)常用：

From the figures/statistics above,

We can conclude/draw a conclusion that...

We can estimate that the population/amount of...will increase/drop steadily/gradually/rapidly...

第三步：連詞成句

1. Most of the students enjoy a harmonious family atmosphere with equal treatment.

2. However, about 16% of the parents expect too much of their children and some are even hard on them.

3. The importance of family education cannot be stressed too much.

4. It’s well known that the family is a person's first school, where parents are the first teachers.

5. Proper family education is always in the fundamental position, which plays a very important role in shaping a child’s growth and development.

6. In my opinion, the ideal family educational mode should be the one that adopts the scientific method of encouragement, guidance, and tolerance.

7. Parents should pay great attention to emotional communication by sparing time to talk with children, listen attentively to their aspirations and give them encouragement.

8. Only in this way can children build self-respect and self-confidence and develop their physical and mental health.

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1. 表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second……, And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2. 表并列補(bǔ)充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3. 表轉(zhuǎn)折對(duì)比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(從句), In spite of+n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand…, Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4. 表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過(guò)渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，

第五步：潤(rùn)色修改