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4．每年三月是植樹活動月，假定你是李華，你們班開展了一次植樹活動，請你根據以下要點，寫一篇日記，記敘這次植樹活動．
1）活動目的：親近自然，綠化環(huán)境
2）活動時間：2017年3月12日
3）活動地點：西山（距你校5公里）
4）具體活動過程
5）活動感受
注意：1．運用日記的正確形式
2．字數(shù)100 左右
3．可適當增加細節(jié)，使行文流暢．
March 12，2017 Sunny
Today our class held a tree planting activity which aims to get close to the nature and beautify the environment．（高分句型一）In the morning，we took a bus to Western hill which is 5 kilometers away from our school．On arrival，we began to work immediately．Some were digging holes．Some were carrying and planting young trees．Others were watering them．After getting the work done，we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees．（高分句型二）Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action．
Seeing the lines of trees，we all had a sense of achievement．（高分句型三）We feel it's our duty to protect our environment．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據提示信息每年三月是植樹活動月，假定你是李華，你們班開展了一次植樹活動，請你根據以下要點，寫一篇日記，記敘這次植樹活動，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：1）活動目的：親近自然，綠化環(huán)境；2）活動時間：2017年3月12日；3）活動地點：西山（距你校5公里）；4）具體活動過程；5）活動感受2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：aim to目的是；get close to靠近，接近；put up 豎起，張貼；a sense of achievement成就感；
Today our class held a tree planting activity which aims to get close to the nature and beautify the environment．（高分句型一）
Others were watering them．After getting the work done，we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees．（高分句型二）
Seeing the lines of trees，we all had a sense of achievement．（高分句型三）

解答 March 12，2017                                                 Sunny
      Today our class held a tree planting activity which aims to get close to the nature and beautify the environment．（高分句型一）In the morning，we took a bus to Western hill which is 5 kilometers away from our school．On arrival，we began to work immediately．Some were digging holes．Some were carrying and planting young trees．Others were watering them．After getting the work done，we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees．（高分句型二）Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action．
      Seeing the lines of trees，we all had a sense of achievement．（高分句型三）We feel it's our duty to protect our environment．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．