Question

6．假定你是李華，你和父母在澳洲旅游期間于5月1日至2日入住Golden Bay Hotel酒店，但對其提供的服務不滿意：1．搬運工送到房間的皮箱破損；2．衛(wèi)生間漏水；3．樓下酒吧噪音持續(xù)到很晚，影響休息．請發(fā)電子郵件給酒店的管理者進行投訴，希望改進服務．
注意：1．文章必須包括所有要點．可適當增加細節(jié)，以使文章連貫．
2．詞數(shù)100，文章開頭結尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)
3．參考詞匯：搬運工porter； 漏水leak
Dear Manager，
My name is Li Hua．I stayed at your hotel，Golden Bay Hotel during my visit to Australia from May 1 to 2 with my parents．However，the service in your hotel left much to be desired．I'm writing this email to express my dissatisfaction．
First，we found our suitcases broken after they were carried to our room by one of your porters．（高分句型一）Second，water was leaking out of the toilet in the bathroom．Third，the noise from the bar downstairs went on so late into the night each night that we couldn't get good rest．（高分句型二）
For the above reasons，I have to say that the service in your hotel is of poor quality．Therefore，I would like to receive a written apology from you．Meanwhile，I hope you can improve your service in the future so that none of the above happens again．（高分句型三）
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱類作文，我們需要用正確的英語把給出的要點表達出來．動筆前，一定要認真分析要點，理解要點要表達的含義，不能遺漏要點，跑題偏題．本作文中給出的要點比較具體，故需要準確表達．寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次．特別注意在選擇句式時要賦予變化．平時除了加強詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果．
【亮點說明】范文中運用一些常見的短語express one's opinion表達某人的意見；would like to do 想要做某事；in the future在將來；For the above reasons，I have to say that the service in your hotel is of poor quality這個句子運用到be of 名詞 的結構；Meanwhile，I hope you can improve your service in the future so that none of the above happens again這個句子so that表示結果；
First，we found our suitcases broken after they were carried to our room by one of your porters．（高分句型一）
Third，the noise from the bar downstairs went on so late into the night each night that we couldn't get good rest．（高分句型二）
Meanwhile，I hope you can improve your service in the future so that none of the above happens again．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Manager，
       My name is Li Hua．I stayed at your hotel，Golden Bay Hotel during my visit to Australia from May 1 to 2 with my parents．However，the service in your hotel left much to be desired．I'm writing this email to express my dissatisfaction．
       First，we found our suitcases broken after they were carried to our room by one of your porters．（高分句型一）Second，water was leaking out of the toilet in the bathroom．Third，the noise from the bar downstairs went on so late into the night each night that we couldn't get good rest．（高分句型二）
       For the above reasons，I have to say that the service in your hotel is of poor quality．Therefore，I would like to receive a written apology from you．Meanwhile，I hope you can improve your service in the future so that none of the above happens again．（高分句型三）
                                                                                                                                                                                         Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．