Question

4．假如你是李華，你的英國筆友Lily在她的微博中說她為了減肥吃減肥藥，而且經(jīng)常不吃飯，導(dǎo)致身體變得很虛弱，狀態(tài)很不佳．請(qǐng)你在她的微博上用英文給她留言，內(nèi)容包括：
1．對(duì)她的現(xiàn)狀表示擔(dān)心；
2．指出吃減肥藥以及經(jīng)常不吃飯的壞處；
3．提出一些健康的減肥方法，如慢跑、定期到健身房健身等．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100個(gè)左右；2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
參考詞匯：減肥藥  weight-loss pill；  慢跑 jogging；  健身房 gym
Dear Lily，
I'm sorry to learn that you are upset about being overweight recently．
I think you should stop taking weight-loss pills in no time because they are harmful to your health．（高分句型一）Besides，you need to eat a healthy diet to recover your strength．There are many other ways to lose weight．For example，jogging is quite a popular form of exercise．You may do it in the morning or after supper．Another way is that you can go to the gym regularly，which is also an effective way of losing weight and keeping healthy．（高分句型二）
In a word，if you insist on exercising，you are sure to have an attractive figure and stay slimand healthy．（高分句型三）

Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假如你是李華，你的英國筆友Lily在她的微博中說她為了減肥吃減肥藥，而且經(jīng)常不吃飯，導(dǎo)致身體變得很虛弱，狀態(tài)很不佳．請(qǐng)你在她的微博上用英文給她留言，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：對(duì)她的現(xiàn)狀表示擔(dān)心；指出吃減肥藥以及經(jīng)常不吃飯的壞處；提出一些健康的減肥方法，如慢跑、定期到健身房健身等．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：in no time立即，馬上；be harmful to 對(duì)…有害；Besides另外；In a word總之；insist on堅(jiān)持；
 I think you should stop taking weight-loss pills in no time because they are harmful to your health．（高分句型一）
Another way is that you can go to the gym regularly，which is also an effective way of losing weight and keeping healthy．（高分句型二）
    In a word，if you insist on exercising，you are sure to have an attractive figure and stay slim and healthy．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Lily，
       I'm sorry to learn that you are upset about being overweight recently．
       I think you should stop taking weight-loss pills in no time because they are harmful to your health．（高分句型一）Besides，you need to eat a healthy diet to recover your strength．There are many other ways to lose weight．For example，jogging is quite a popular form of exercise．You may do it in the morning or after supper．Another way is that you can go to the gym regularly，which is also an effective way of losing weight and keeping healthy．（高分句型二）
       In a word，if you insist on exercising，you are sure to have an attractive figure and stay slim and healthy．（高分句型三）
                                                                  
Yours'
                                                                     LiHua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．