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10．假定你是李華，在"五一勞動(dòng)節(jié)"期間，你參加了美心旅行社舉辦的"美麗西藏行""打包旅行"活動(dòng)，活動(dòng)之后，你對(duì)這次活動(dòng)非常不滿，理由如下：
要點(diǎn)如下：
▲．行途中的食物很差；
▲工作人員的服務(wù)態(tài)度不好；
▲．住宿條件差，不安全；
▲．購物的時(shí)間和場(chǎng)所安排的較多．
請(qǐng)就此事給美心旅行社的經(jīng)理寫一封投訴信．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．參考詞匯：
五一勞動(dòng)節(jié) May Day； 打包旅行 package tour；  美麗西藏行 A eautiful travel to Tibet；
美心旅行社 Pleasant Travel Agency； 投訴．抱怨 complain （about）…
4．信的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，但不計(jì)入詞數(shù)．
Dear Manager，
My name is Li Hua．I am a passenger of your travel agency．
I'm writing to complain about the package tour--A beautiful travel to Tibet to Yunnan organized by your travel agency-Pleasant Travel Agency on May Day．（高分句型一）
Firstly，the food on the trip was terrible and we even couldn't have enough to eat．Secondly，I think that the guide from your agency was unfriendly and impolite to us．Besides，o our disappointment，we were arranged to stay in a poorly equipped hotel with no hot water supply．Lastly，we were forced to stay in so many shops for so long to buy unnecessary goods．（高分句型二）We were really tired of it．
I will appreciate it if you can take our complaints seriously and make every effort to improve your service in the future．（高分句型三）
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假定你是李華，在"五一勞動(dòng)節(jié)"期間，你參加了美心旅行社舉辦的"美麗西藏行""打包旅行"活動(dòng)，活動(dòng)之后，你對(duì)這次活動(dòng)非常不滿，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：▲．行途中的食物很差；▲工作人員的服務(wù)態(tài)度不好；▲．住宿條件差，不安全；▲．購物的時(shí)間和場(chǎng)所安排的較多．請(qǐng)就此事給美心旅行社的經(jīng)理寫一封投訴信2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：complain about抱怨，投訴；Firstly首先；Secondly其次；Besides另外；Lastly，最后；be tired of厭倦，厭煩；take…seriously 認(rèn)真對(duì)待；
I'm writing to complain about the  package tour--A beautiful travel to Tibet to Yunnan organized by your travel agency-Pleasant Travel Agency on May Day．（高分句型一）
Lastly，we were forced to stay in so many shops for so long to buy unnecessary goods．（高分句型二）
I will appreciate it if you can take our complaints seriously and make every effort to improve your service in the future．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Manager，
       My name is Li Hua．I am a passenger of your travel agency．I'm writing to complain about the  package tour--A beautiful travel to Tibet to Yunnan organized by your travel agency-Pleasant Travel Agency on May Day．（高分句型一）
       Firstly，the food on the trip was terrible and we even couldn't have enough to eat．Secondly，I think that the guide from your agency was unfriendly and impolite to us．Besides，o our disappointment，we were arranged to stay in a poorly equipped hotel with no hot water supply．Lastly，we were forced to stay in so many shops for so long to buy unnecessary goods．（高分句型二）We were really tired of it．
       I will appreciate it if you can take our complaints seriously and make every effort to improve your service in the future．（高分句型三）
                                                                                                                              Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                               Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．