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4．假如你是李華，高中畢業(yè)后想到美國(guó)弗吉尼亞大學(xué)（University of Virginia ）計(jì)算機(jī)專業(yè)深造．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一封入學(xué)申請(qǐng)．
1．個(gè)人情況；
2．學(xué)習(xí)情及特長(zhǎng)；
3．申請(qǐng)入學(xué)的理由；
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100 左右，開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Sir or Madam，
I'm writing to you in the hope that I would have the chance to further my studies at your university．（高分句型一）
First，please allow me to briefly introduce myself．This coming June，I'll graduate from Xinhua High School．I'm an all-round student with excellent grades in all subjects，in particular the computer，and English．That is the reason why I want to major in computer science in an English-speaking country．（高分句型二）
I know that the University of Virginia ranks among the top universities in the USAand enjoys a good reputation all around the world．（高分句型三）It would be a great honor for me to study at your university．I'd appreciate it very much if I could receive your reply!
Sinceely yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假如你是李華，高中畢業(yè)后想到美國(guó)弗吉尼亞大學(xué)（University of Virginia ）計(jì)算機(jī)專業(yè)深造．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一封入學(xué)申請(qǐng)，寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：個(gè)人情況；學(xué)習(xí)情及特長(zhǎng)；申請(qǐng)入學(xué)的理由；2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：graduate from 從…畢業(yè)；an all-round student 全面發(fā)展的學(xué)生；in particular尤其，特別；all around the world世界范圍內(nèi)
I'm writing to you in the hope that I would have the chance to further my studies at your university．（高分句型一）
That is the reason why I want to major in computer science in an English-speaking country．（高分句型二）
  I know that the University of Virginia ranks among the top universities in the USA and enjoys a good reputation all around the world．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
       I'm writing to you in the hope that I would have the chance to further my studies at your university．（高分句型一）
        First，please allow me to briefly introduce myself．This coming June，I'll graduate from Xinhua High School．I'm an all-round student with excellent grades in all subjects，in particular the computer，and English．That is the reason why I want to major in computer science in an English-speaking country．（高分句型二）
        I know that the University of Virginia ranks among the top universities in the USA and enjoys a good reputation all around the world．（高分句型三）It would be a great honor for me to study at your university．I'd appreciate it very much if I could receive your reply!
                                                                                                Sincerely yours，
                                                                                                Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．