Question

15．隨著人們生活水平的提高，私家車的數(shù)量逐年增加，但隨之而來的塞車問題日益嚴重．假設(shè)你是學(xué)校學(xué)生會主席李華，請給校報的英語專欄寫一篇英語稿件，建議學(xué)生們盡量騎自行車出行，內(nèi)容如下：
1．現(xiàn)象（phenomenon）：由于家長接送學(xué)生造成學(xué)校周邊交通阻塞的問題非常嚴重．
2．建議：選擇環(huán)保的出行方式-騎車．
理由：a．減輕交通壓力；b．減少噪音和空氣污染；c．鍛煉身體．
3．改善交通，從我做起．
注意：
（1）可適當(dāng)加入細節(jié)信息，以使行文連貫；
（2）短文字數(shù)：不少于100字．
Dear boys and girls，
I am Li Hua，chairman of the students'union．It is a common phenomenon that
                                                               
Yours Truly，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息隨著人們生活水平的提高，私家車的數(shù)量逐年增加，但隨之而來的塞車問題日益嚴重．假設(shè)你是學(xué)校學(xué)生會主席李華，請給校報的英語專欄寫一篇英語稿件，建議學(xué)生們盡量騎自行車出行，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：現(xiàn)象（phenomenon）：由于家長接送學(xué)生造成學(xué)校周邊交通阻塞的問題非常嚴重．建議：選擇環(huán)保的出行方式-騎車．理由：a．減輕交通壓力；b．減少噪音和空氣污染；c．鍛煉身體．改善交通，從我做起． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：due to由于； common phenomenon普遍現(xiàn)象；traffic jam  交通堵塞；environmentally-friendly  環(huán)境友好的，保護環(huán)境的；relieve pressure  減輕壓力；air pollution  空氣污染；start from ourselves  從我們自身開始
It is a common phenomenon that the problem of traffic jam around our school is more and more serious due to parents'driving kids to and from school．（高分句型一）
Actually，we can choose a healthy and environmentally-friendly way of travelling，that is，bicycle riding．（高分句型二）
It is obvious that bicycle riding can bring us many benefits，such as relieving pressure on the downtown transportation，making less noise and air pollution and so forth．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear boys and girls，
      I am Li Hua，chairman of the students'union．It is a common phenomenon that the problem of traffic jam around our school is more and more serious due to parents'driving kids to and from school．（高分句型一）
      Actually，we can choose a healthy and environmentally-friendly way of travelling，that is，bicycle riding．（高分句型二）It is obvious that bicycle riding can bring us many benefits，such as relieving pressure on the downtown transportation，making less noise and air pollution and so forth．（高分句型三）Most importantly，it does good to your health，because if you go to school by riding a bicycle instead of driving or taking a car，you can have a better chance of getting enough exercise you need every day．
       Reduce transportation pressure by riding a bike and start from ourselves!
                                                                                                                                                                                                                         Yours Truly，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                             Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．