Question

近來我國多地霧霾天氣不斷增多，極大地影響了人們的健康與生活。請你根據(jù)提示，用英語寫一篇文章，向某英語報社投稿。
提示：1. 實況描述
2. 對生活造成的影響
3. 分析霧霾形成的原因
4. 提出治理污染的建議。
注意：1. 上下文連貫，行文流暢。
2. 詞數(shù)100-120 (首句已給出，并不計入詞數(shù))。
霧霾天氣the hazy weather       口罩  mask
Dear Editor,
Recently many places in China were blanketed with thick fog.____________________________
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Editor,
Recently many places in China were blanketed with thick fog. Everything around disappeared from our sight. Some highways were closed. More traffic jams and accidents happened .People had to wear masks .What’s worse,  many people found it difficult to breathe.　
The heavy hazy weather in China has been caused by many factors. First, the severely polluted environment contributed a lot to this nightmare. Second , the increase of cars in the city area plays an important role .  The cars send off a lot of poisonous gases . In my opinion , we should call on people to use more public transport, thus reducing the number of cars in the streets . Besides , some factories  which  cause pollution should be closed down . What’s more , we have to do more to raise people’s awareness of environmental protection .Only in this way can we expect to have more sunny days .
Best regards,
　　                                                                     Yours，
LiHua

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類書面表達，文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，而且很具體，考生要把要點解釋清楚，不能有遺漏。除了表達這些要點以外，還要給出自己的建議，這就要求考生自己拓展發(fā)揮，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。
【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，運用了一些詞組：contributed a lot to有助于，plays an important role起著重要的作用，send off排放，In my opinion在我看來，call on號召。范文中的句式多變，運用不同的語法知識： many people found it difficult to breathe.這句話用了固定句型， some factories  which  cause pollution should be closed down . 這句話用了定語從句，.Only in this way can we expect to have more sunny days . 這句話用了倒裝句。還有范文用了What’s worse, First, Second , Besides ,這樣的關聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。