Question

春節(jié)即將來臨，你打算用以往攢下的零花錢給父母買一件禮物。請以“A present for my parents ”為題寫一篇文章。要點(diǎn)如下：

1. 你送的禮物：一張健康俱樂部的貴賓卡；

2. 父母的現(xiàn)狀：父親是教師，工作很辛苦；母親喜歡讀書，但缺乏運(yùn)動(dòng)；

3. 你送禮物的原因；

4. 該禮物對他們可能產(chǎn)生的影響和帶來的變化。

詞數(shù)：100左右。

文章的開頭已經(jīng)寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

參考詞匯：貴賓卡 a VIP card

A present for my parents

The Spring Festival is coming and I want to buy a present for my parents with my pocket money.

Answer 1

A present for my parents

The Spring Festival is coming and I want to buy a presents with my pocket money. That is a VIP card of a health club. My father works hard as a teacher, spending most of his time at school. I know he works with great effort and has little time to take exercise. My mother loves reading and often dives into piles of books, but she seldom goes out for exercise.

As I grow up, they are getting older. Both of them should exercise more but neither is doing enough. With the health club membership, I hope that they will find time to do more exercise.

I want to express my love and thanks to them by giving them this present. I think that they can relax themselves in the health club and make more friends there. At the same time, I hope with more exercise, they will enjoy better health. What’s more, they can spend more time with each other.

【解析】考查概要寫作，圍繞春節(jié)即將來臨，考生用以往攢下的零花錢給父母買一件禮物，闡述禮物對他們可能產(chǎn)生的影響和帶來的變化。考生在寫作時(shí)要注意論點(diǎn)清晰及條理清楚。題目已給定大致的觀點(diǎn)，要注意漢譯英的正確性以及不要遺漏觀點(diǎn)，特別注意不要逐條翻譯。

文章的亮點(diǎn)之一就是句式的靈活多變。本文開篇第二句， My father works hard as a teacher, spending most of his time at school.本句用了一個(gè)較為高級(jí)的伴隨狀語，省略了主語；文章第二段第一句As I grow up, they are getting older.As引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句；文章第二段倒數(shù)第一句With the health club membership, I hope that they will find time to do more exercise。With 的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)。還有諸多精彩的句子就不一一列舉里，這些都顯示了較好的英語功底。

本文主要從為什么送禮物，希望禮物能為他們帶來什么樣的改變來寫。然后用簡單的語言表達(dá)出來，既符合題目要求，又完整的概括了所有的觀點(diǎn)，是一篇較好的概要寫作。

考點(diǎn)：考查概要寫作