Question

請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列提示，以 “Mr. Sun—my English teacher”為題，寫一篇短文。
孫老師是一位中年教師，戴一副近視眼鏡。
他有耐心，富有想象力，講課生動(dòng)有趣，專心致力于教學(xué)，經(jīng)常備課到很晚；在他的幫助下，我開(kāi)始對(duì)英語(yǔ)感興趣，并取得進(jìn)步。
課外和學(xué)生一起活動(dòng)，深受學(xué)生歡迎，是學(xué)生的良師益友。
注意： 1. 短文必須包括以上所有要點(diǎn)，可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫；
2. 詞數(shù)：100 左右。

Answer 1

Mr. Sun, my English teacher, is a middle-aged man with a pair of glasses.
He is a teacher with patience and imagination. Although sometimes he is very strict with us in our studies, his humor makes his classes lively and interesting. With his help, I am beginning to show interest in English and have made great progress. He works so hard that he devotes all his time and energy to teaching, often preparing his lessons late into night.
What’s more, he often joins us in after-class activities.
He is not only our teacher, but also our friend. We all love and respect him.

試題分析：考查提綱作文。本篇作文比較簡(jiǎn)單，介紹一個(gè)人物。而且孫老師的具體的情況都已經(jīng)通過(guò)提綱給了出來(lái)，對(duì)于考生來(lái)說(shuō)只需要翻譯即可。在串聯(lián)全文的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞來(lái)連接，如What’s more等。同時(shí)也要使用高級(jí)的詞匯和和復(fù)雜的句式提示文章的文采和檔次，如范文的句子：He works so hard that he devotes all his time and energy to teaching, often preparing his lessons late into night.用了so that句型和現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語(yǔ)，在文章的最后可以使用倒裝句的形式來(lái)加強(qiáng)文章的語(yǔ)氣，形成豹尾的結(jié)局。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：提綱類作文的要點(diǎn)都給出來(lái)了，所以一定要注意要點(diǎn)的完整性，不要遺漏，同時(shí)要注意使用多樣句式，讓文章富有變化，更有層次。