Question

假設(shè)你是重慶朝陽(yáng)中學(xué)學(xué)生劉洋，得知2013年香港大學(xué)要在大陸進(jìn)行自主招生的消息后非常的高興，你有意向香港大學(xué)申請(qǐng)，參加自主招生考試。請(qǐng)根據(jù)表格信息，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一封自薦信。

個(gè)人信息	男，16歲，高三學(xué)生
性格和潛質(zhì)	開(kāi)朗，喜歡與人交往； 有良好的團(tuán)隊(duì)精神； 適應(yīng)能力強(qiáng)。
學(xué)習(xí)與獲獎(jiǎng)情況	學(xué)習(xí)刻苦，成績(jī)名列前茅； 曾獲“希望英語(yǔ)”英語(yǔ)演講全國(guó)一等獎(jiǎng)。
個(gè)人愛(ài)好與特長(zhǎng)	……

注意：1) 詞數(shù)100左右；
2) 信的開(kāi)頭與結(jié)尾以為你寫(xiě)好（不計(jì)入總詞匯）。
3）可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫。
4) 參考詞匯：
自主招生independent recruitment
英語(yǔ)演講比賽 English Speech contest
團(tuán)隊(duì)精神 teamwork
Dear Sir,
My name is Liu Yang, from Zhao Yang High School in Chongqing.
Yours Sincerely,     
Liu Yang

Answer 1

Dear Sir,
My name is Liu Yang, from Zhao Yang High School in Chongqing. I am more than glad when I get the news that Hong Kong University will have independent recruitment in mainland. I would like to apply for admission for taking part in the independent recruitment exams of your school.
I am a sixteen-year-old boy, who is studying in Senior 3. I am sociable, easy-going and good at communicating with others. I have made many friends and I can do well in a team. Meanwhile, I am quite independent and it is easy for me to adapt to a new environment. My hobbies are playing basketball and football. I am also good at playing the violin.
As a senior student, I have been working hard at my lessons and managed to get high grades. I am especially good at English, who have won the first prize in an English Speech Contest of Hope English. All this will enable me to continue my study in your university without having much trouble with a language barrier.
I should be grateful if you can take my application into consideration.
Looking forward to your early reply.  
Yours sincerely,
LiuYang

試題分析：這是提綱式作文：要點(diǎn)以表格形式給出，要點(diǎn)比較全，因此考生只需要根據(jù)所給提綱，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔。按順序安排好材料。使用靈活多變的句式表達(dá)要點(diǎn)，不要遺漏，同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。考生必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫(xiě)情況，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】I am more than glad when I get the news that Hong Kong University will have independent recruitment in mainland.這句話用了同位語(yǔ)從句 ，I am a sixteen-year-old boy, who is studying in Senior 3. 這句話用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，. I am quite independent and it is easy for me to adapt to a new environment.這句話用了it做形式主語(yǔ)， I am especially good at English, who have won the first prize in an English Speech Contest of Hope English. 這句話也是用了定語(yǔ)從句，All this will enable me to continue my study in your university without having much trouble with a language barrier.這句話用了動(dòng)名詞。   I should be grateful if you can take my application into consideration. 這句話用了take sth into consideration。還有文章還用了Meanwhile, 這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。