Question

作為一名高三學(xué)生的你，明年即將畢業(yè)。現(xiàn)在校報征稿，請根據(jù)以下要點寫一篇英語短文，談?wù)勀銓Ω呷�生活的體會和建議。
1. 對老師與家長的關(guān)愛表示感謝；
2. 向與自己發(fā)生過矛盾的同學(xué)表達(dá)歉意；
3. 努力學(xué)習(xí)，實現(xiàn)人生夢想；
4. 對學(xué)弟、學(xué)妹的建議。
注意：
1. 可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫；
2. 詞數(shù)：100 左右（開頭已給出，不計入總字?jǐn)?shù)）。
High school is always considered as the most cherished period of one’ s life. As a Senior 3 student, it won’t be long before I graduate.

Answer 1

High school is always considered as the most cherished period of one’s life. As a Senior 3 student, it won’t be long before I graduate. Now, I have much to share with my fellow students.
Firstly, I would like to show my appreciation of help from those standing by me all the way, teachers, parents and friends included. Without their help and advice, my life would be different. Secondly, it's high time to say sorry to classmates whom I hurt or misunderstood. Communication and smiles act as bridges to friendship. Above all, I've made up my mind to make every effort to study, for I believe hard work is the key to success. Just as the old saying goes, "No pains, no gains."
Finally I hope that all the younger fellows can make full use of time, because time and tide wait for no men.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類書面表達(dá)，文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，但是不是很具體，考生要把要點解釋清楚，不能有遺漏。還要有所拓展，內(nèi)容要充實，這就要求考生自己拓展發(fā)揮，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。
【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，運(yùn)用了一些詞組：Above all首要的是，最重要的是, made up my mind to do下決心做，make every effort to do努力做，make full use of充分利用，范文中的句式多變，運(yùn)用不同的語法知識： I would like to show my appreciation of help from those standing by me all the way, teachers, parents and friends included.這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞做定語， it's high time to say sorry to classmates whom I hurt or misunderstood. Communication and smiles act as bridges to friendship這句話用了固定句型. it's high time to do該做什么了…，ust as the old saying goes, "No pains, no gains."  time and tide wait for no men.這兩句是諺語，還有范文還使用 Firstly, Secondly, Finally這樣的詞使文章更加連貫。