Question

【題目】假如你是眉山市某中學高三學生李華，你的美國筆友Bob來信介紹了他的家鄉(xiāng)并希望了解你的家鄉(xiāng)，請根據(jù)以下要點給他寫封回信。

1.家鄉(xiāng)所處的自然環(huán)境；2.家鄉(xiāng)近年的發(fā)展變化；3.家鄉(xiāng)發(fā)展中存在的問題；

4.對家鄉(xiāng)未來發(fā)展的建議(兩點)。

注意：1.詞數(shù)120左右；2.開頭語和結(jié)尾語已為你寫好;

3.可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫; 4.文中不能出現(xiàn)考生真實姓名和家鄉(xiāng)名稱。

Dear Bob,

I’m glad to receive your last letter telling me about your beautiful hometown.

I'm looking forward to your next letter.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Bob,

I’m glad to receive your last letter telling me about your beautiful hometown. Now I'd like to introduce my hometown to you.

Located on the Minjiang River, my hometown is very comfortable to live in with wonderful scenery and pleasant weather, which is attractive to visitors from all over the country. In recent years, many great changes have taken place. Its economy has been developing rapidly. Lots of roads, factories and houses have been built. Besides, more schools and hospitals are available for us people. We are living a happier life. However, there are still some problems, such as water and air pollution and heavy traffic during rush hours, which affect our life very badly.

In my opinion, my hometown should not only develop its economy scientifically but we must attach great importance to protecting the environment so that we'll have a better hometown in the future.（134 words）

I'm looking forward to your next letter.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：考查應用文中的書信的寫作。請你以李華的名義給你的一位美國筆友Bob寫一封回信，介紹一下自己的家鄉(xiāng)。本篇習作要點都已經(jīng)給出，書信類短文的關鍵在于要點要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。但是要點只是提綱，考生還要在此基礎上增加細節(jié)，不要逐字逐句翻譯，同時注意謀篇布局的順序，運用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時選擇高級的詞匯和語法項目讓文章更有文采。描述要盡量選擇簡潔的語言，運用合適的語法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點都準確表述出。難點在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運用高級詞匯和固定短語準確表述。除此之外，還要用適當?shù)倪B接詞把句子連接起來，這樣文章會顯得更連貫。

【亮點說明】本篇習作第二段的第一句寫得非常好。使用了located on the Minjiang River這樣的非謂語動詞擔當狀語，同時又使用了非限制性定語從句which is attractive…，整句話既介紹了家鄉(xiāng)的地理位置，又總結(jié)它的風景之美。最后一段第一句話使用了短語not only…but also連接了兩個句子，同時又使用高級短語attach importance to，整個文章要點齊全，敘述簡明又全面。