Question

假如你是李華。你的兩位朋友Tom與Peter幾天前發(fā)生了爭(zhēng)吵。3月9日是Peter生日，Tom想送他一個(gè)禮物來(lái)緩和關(guān)系，修復(fù)友情，特地發(fā)來(lái)郵件尋求你的建議。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)給Tom回一封郵件：

1．禮物選擇：

2．你的理由；

3．其它和解建議。

注意：

? 1．詞數(shù)100左右：

? 2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫：

? 3．開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾己給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Tom,

I'm glad to hear that you are considering making up with Peter．

 

Best wishes,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

a possible version：

Dear Tom,

I’m glad to hear that you are considering making up with Peter. If I were you, I would consider a bike as a birthday present for him.

As far as I know, Peter is always in poor health so he can take more exercise by riding a bike to build up his body. In the meanwhile, you can often go outing by bike together, which is helpful to rebuild your friendship. Besides, taking a bike is an environmentally-friendly means of transport. It’s convenient for him to get around as well.

Apart from giving him a gift, you can also adopt other means, such as travelling, seeing a movie, having dinner and going shopping. No matter what you do, being sincere is the most important. I really hope that we can be good friends forever.

Best wishes,

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【解析】

試題分析：本文要求寫(xiě)一封郵件，同學(xué)們對(duì)此形式非常熟悉，內(nèi)容也和學(xué)生的生活聯(lián)系密切，所以寫(xiě)起來(lái)應(yīng)該是得心應(yīng)手，寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)注意的問(wèn)題是：一、仔細(xì)審題，寫(xiě)郵件的目的是就道歉的事情尋求建議，所以?xún)?nèi)容要圍繞三個(gè)要點(diǎn)展開(kāi)。二、在寫(xiě)郵件時(shí)要開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山提出寫(xiě)信的目的，就本文而言要首先表明自己對(duì)禮物的建議。三、在篇章結(jié)構(gòu)方面，要注意層次性和邏輯性，尤其是在解釋理由方面，可以使用一些表示層次的連詞，如firstly、secondly、besides、what’s more等。四、在語(yǔ)言方面，要簡(jiǎn)潔明了，盡量使用多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)以提高文章檔次。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)要點(diǎn)全面，層次清晰。開(kāi)頭用虛擬語(yǔ)氣的句子委婉地提出了自己的建議。在解釋原因和提出其他建議時(shí)，作者用到了as far as I know 、in the meanwhile 、besides、apart from等詞匯和短語(yǔ)，使段落非常具有層次性，而且還用到了定語(yǔ)從句which is helpful to rebuild your friendship.狀語(yǔ)從句Peter is always in poor health so he can take more exercise by riding a bike to build up his body，No matter what you do, being sincere is the most important. I really hope that we can be good friends forever.等復(fù)合句，顯示了作者對(duì)句型結(jié)構(gòu)的準(zhǔn)確把握，成為了文章的亮點(diǎn)。

考點(diǎn)：考查提綱作文。