Question

科技發(fā)展給人們帶來便利的同時(shí)也引發(fā)了很多困擾：人際間的溝通困難、生存環(huán)境惡化、疾病蔓延…面對(duì)這些問題，我們將何去何從？
根據(jù)你的體會(huì)，結(jié)合具體事例，談?wù)勛约旱目捶ê徒ㄗh。
詞數(shù)120左右，短文的開頭已給出，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)。
With the fast development of technology, we enjoy its convenience as well as suffer the troubles.
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Answer 1

One possible version:
With the fast development of technology, we enjoy its convenience as well as suffer the troubles which we human beings can never afford to ignore.
As is seen everywhere, people nowadays live a life on the go with a mobile phone which makes them available at any time. However, they may bend over the phone even when they are sitting face to face, lacking in heart-to-heart communication. Meanwhile , the industry brings about more products as well as pollutes air and water. With PM2.5 filling the air, we, especially the young and the old, fall victim to the worsening air. What’s worse, we are faced with more serious food problems which in turn contribute to more deadly diseases like cancers.
As a matter of fact, human beings are to blame for all these problems. If we wish to leave our next generations a still beautiful world, we have to take action from now on. Stop destroying the earth by cutting down trees and turning green land into concrete. Stop pouring waste into rivers and oceans to protect the water source. No longer waste materials and food but save natural resources for our future generations. What’s the most important is to educate the public and carry out the laws firmly. Hope our combined efforts will pay off one day.

解析試題分析：本文是篇議論文, 討論科技發(fā)展給人們帶來的利與弊， 根據(jù)你的體會(huì)，結(jié)合具體事例，談?wù)勛约旱目捶ê徒ㄗh。寫作時(shí)需要增加具體事例。短文要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。注意主語謂語的一致性。字?jǐn)?shù)要求120詞左右。寫作時(shí) 盡量使用較高級(jí)的詞匯和句子的連貫銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子，比如As is seen everywhere， on the go，As a matter of fact ，in turn， contribute to are to blame。還運(yùn)用了which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句、動(dòng)詞不定式作表語等較復(fù)雜的句子等。并注意了句子開頭的變化和句子之間的銜接，如：However，Meanwhile， What’s worse等為文章增色不少。