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16．你們班準(zhǔn)備舉辦一個(gè)主題為"My Favorite Sports Star"的班會(huì)，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下表格信息，寫一篇英語短文，簡要介紹羽毛球選手林丹，并向全班作演講．
注意：1．詞數(shù)120左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)添加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．開頭與結(jié)尾已寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．

姓名	林丹，綽號(hào)"超級(jí)丹"
籍貫	中國福建龍巖
出生日期	1983.10.14
身高	1.7m
體重	72kg
職業(yè)生涯	5歲開始打羽毛球；12歲參軍；18歲進(jìn)入國家隊(duì)；獲得多項(xiàng)國際大賽冠軍，包括北京奧運(yùn)會(huì)和倫敦奧運(yùn)會(huì)兩枚金牌
比賽風(fēng)格	左手握拍，以扣球著稱；獲勝后常常敬禮或?qū)⒁路�扔向觀眾以示慶祝

參考詞匯：羽毛球 badminton； 綽號(hào) nickname； 冠軍 champion； 敬禮 salute； 扣球 smash
Good afternoon，everyone!
My favorite sports star is Lin Dan，whose nickname is Super Dan，a world-famous badminton player．（高分句型一）
Born on Oct.14th，1983，in Longyan，F(xiàn)ujian Province，China，Lin Dan started playing badminton at the age of five and joined the army when he was twelve．（高分句型二）His professional career began six years later when he was admitted into the national team．He is 1.78 m tall and weighs 72kg．He is famous for hissmash as well as his left-handed playing style．So far，he has received lots of champions and honors in a variety of international competitions，including the two Olympic gold medals from Beijing and London．（高分句型三）After winning a game，he often salutes audiences of all sides or throws his sportswear to the crowds to celebrate his victory．
Thank you for listening．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于圖表類作文，根據(jù)提示信息你們班準(zhǔn)備舉辦一個(gè)主題為"My Favorite Sports Star"的班會(huì)，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下表格信息，寫一篇英語短文，簡要介紹羽毛球選手林丹，并向全班作演講   寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息  2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在圖表的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：at the age of在…歲的時(shí)候；be admitted into被錄取；is famous for因?yàn)椤�而出名；including包括；a variety of 各種各樣；
My favorite sports star is Lin Dan，whose nickname is Super Dan，a world-famous badminton player．（高分句型一）
  Born on Oct.14th，1983，in Longyan，F(xiàn)ujian Province，China，Lin Dan started playing badminton at the age of five and joined the army when he was twelve．（高分句型二）
So far，he has received lots of champions and honors in a variety of international competitions，including the two Olympic gold medals from Beijing and London．（高分句型三）

解答 Good afternoon，everyone!
        My favorite sports star is Lin Dan，whose nickname is Super Dan，a world-famous badminton player．（高分句型一）
        Born on Oct.14th，1983，in Longyan，F(xiàn)ujian Province，China，Lin Dan started playing badminton at the age of five and joined the army when he was twelve．（高分句型二）His professional career began six years later when he was admitted into the national team．He is 1.78 m tall and weighs 72kg．He is famous for his smash as well as his left-handed playing style．So far，he has received lots of champions and honors in a variety of international competitions，including the two Olympic gold medals from Beijing and London．（高分句型三）After winning a game，he often salutes audiences of all sides or throws his sportswear to the crowds to celebrate his victory．
         Thank you for listening．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．