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14．隨著科技的進(jìn)步，多媒體已走進(jìn)很多學(xué)校的課堂．課間休息時(shí)，有些學(xué)校利用它來(lái)播放音樂(lè)．假如昨天你班就"課間是否要播放音樂(lè)"展開(kāi)了討論．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇短文，陳述討論結(jié)果．
[寫作內(nèi)容]
1．討論的時(shí)間和討論的問(wèn)題；
2．學(xué)生們的觀點(diǎn)：
大多數(shù)學(xué)生認(rèn)為：活躍氣氛，放松，帶來(lái)快樂(lè)，學(xué)習(xí)效率高．
部分學(xué)生認(rèn)為：時(shí)間短，沒(méi)效果；課間太吵，需要安靜．
3．達(dá)成的共識(shí)：最好播放柔和并適合于中學(xué)生的音樂(lè)．
參考詞匯：the class break，efficiency（效率），relaxation（放松），agreement（共識(shí)）
[寫作要求]句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇議論文寫作．提示部分已經(jīng)明確地給出了寫作的話題，并且提出了寫作的內(nèi)容以及要求．以課件是否應(yīng)該播放音樂(lè)為話題展開(kāi)討論，寫作時(shí)要求說(shuō)明討論的時(shí)間和話題，呈現(xiàn)多方面的觀點(diǎn)，同時(shí)落腳于以最好播放柔和并適合于中學(xué)生的音樂(lè)為共識(shí)，并且要求以5個(gè)句子表達(dá)全部?jī)?nèi)容．寫作時(shí)要注意適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容，以保證文章的連貫性．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】第一句話Yesterday we had a discussion about whether music should be played during the class break or not．使用whether引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，直接說(shuō)明了背景時(shí)間和討論話題；第四句話What is needed most during the class break is peace rather than the noise produced by music．使用what引導(dǎo)的主語(yǔ)從句，說(shuō)明課間學(xué)生需要安靜的環(huán)境方式休息，而不是需要吵鬧的音樂(lè)．最后一句話After a heated discussion，we finally reached an agreement that it's better to play soft music，which is suitable for our middle school students as well．
使用that引導(dǎo)的同位語(yǔ)從句和which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句說(shuō)明討論到處的最后共識(shí)．文章在短語(yǔ)和詞組的運(yùn)用上，靈活多變，使得文章表達(dá)更加形象生動(dòng)．produce a better efficiency and greater relaxation，get the expected effect，a heated discussion，reached an agreemen，is suitable for等詞組，表達(dá)都很到位和生動(dòng)；而Towards this，as well as，rather than，as well．等介詞短語(yǔ)的運(yùn)用，使得文章表達(dá)更加連貫和生動(dòng)．

解答 Yesterday we had a discussion about whether music should be played during the class break or not．（高分句型一）Towards this，most of the students think that music should be played for it can produce a better efficiency and greater relaxation as well as a lively and happy atmosphere．（高分句型二）However，some believe they can't get the expected effect from playing music，for the class break time is short．What is needed most during the class break is peace rather than the noise produced by music．（高分句型三）After a heated discussion，we finally reached an agreement that it's better to play soft music，which is suitable for our middle school students as well．（高分句型四）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧