Question

假設你是新華中學的學生李華，不久前參加了學校舉辦的英語演講比賽。你的英國朋友Tom發(fā)電子郵件詢問你參賽的情況，請根據(jù)以下要點給他回封電子郵件。
內(nèi)容包括：
1．感謝對方的關心；
2．因為賽前不夠重視，沒有充分準備，比賽時緊張，結果初賽被淘汰；
3．此次經(jīng)歷給你的感受和體會。
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．開頭語和結束語已為你寫好。
參考詞匯：英語演講比賽English Speaking Contest淘汰eliminate
Dear Tom，
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Best wishes!
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Tom,
Thank you for your concern! But I regret to tell you that I was eliminated in the first part of the English Speaking Contest. The main reason is that I didn’t attach much importance to it and was not well prepared. Besides,when standing on the stage,I was so nervous that I made some mistakes.Though the judges thought highly of my skills of the speech,I had to face the fact. From this experience,I realized my shortcomings and learned some lessons.As the old saying goes,failure is the mother of success.If I have another chance,I’ll take it and try my best to succeed.
Best wishes!
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

解析試題分析：考查應用文中的書信的寫作。你的英國朋友Tom發(fā)電子郵件詢問你參賽的情況，請根據(jù)以下要點給他回封電子郵件。要點都已經(jīng)給出，書信類短文的關鍵在于要點要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。同時注意謀篇布局的順序，運用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時選擇高級的詞匯和語法項目讓文章更有文采。審題時注意時態(tài)的選擇，描述要盡量選擇簡潔的語言，難點在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運用高級詞匯和固定短語準確表述。
【亮點說明】范文使用了一些常用的短語： regret to“很遺憾的做…”，attach much importance to “非常重視”，think highly of “高度評價”The main reason is that I didn’t attach much importance to it and was not well prepared. 這句話用了表語從句， when standing on the stage,I was so nervous that I made some mistakes.這句話用了狀語從句的省略和so …that…句型， As the old saying goes,failure is the mother of success.這句話用了非限制性定語從句和諺語文章還使用了Besides,這樣的關聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。
考點：考查書信類書面表達