Question

假設(shè)你和你朋友在中山公園散步時(shí)遇到的一件事，請(qǐng)根據(jù)要求寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文。

【寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容】

 

時(shí)間	上星期六下午
地點(diǎn)	在中山公園的湖邊
事件	我和朋友在散步，湖中一個(gè)小女孩在呼救。我們沒(méi)來(lái)得及脫衣服就跳進(jìn)湖中將她救上岸，對(duì)她做了人工呼吸，并在她恢復(fù)知覺(jué)后，送她去醫(yī)院。我們還打電話通知她的家長(zhǎng)。最終小女孩得救了。
評(píng)價(jià)	家長(zhǎng)很感激，醫(yī)生對(duì)我們的急救給予高度評(píng)價(jià)。
感受	懂得急救只是很重要。

 

參考詞匯：急救 first aid

【寫(xiě)作要求】

只能使用5個(gè)句子表達(dá)全部的內(nèi)容。

【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確、內(nèi)容完整和篇章連貫。  _______________________________________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

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Last Saturday afternoon, my friend and I were walking by the lake in Zhongshan Park when suddenly we heard a girl calling for help in the lake. We hurried to jump into the lake without taking off our clothes, swam towards her and pulled her out. Then we made her breathe using mouth-to-mouth way before she came to herself, sent her to hospital and telephoned her parents. Afterwards, we were told that the girl was saved because of the timely rescue.

Her parents were very thankful to us and the doctors thought highly of our first aid, which made us realize that knowing first aid is very important for everyone.

【解析】

試題分析：根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達(dá)的要點(diǎn)．設(shè)計(jì)好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時(shí)態(tài)、人稱等，把要點(diǎn)串聯(lián)起來(lái)，構(gòu)成文章框架。選詞造句，避難選易。在要點(diǎn)、層次明確的情況下，選用自己最熟悉的單詞、句式進(jìn)行造句．如果不會(huì)用復(fù)雜句就用簡(jiǎn)單句表達(dá)要點(diǎn)；必須用5句話能概括所有的要點(diǎn)。

考點(diǎn)：基礎(chǔ)寫(xiě)作。

點(diǎn)評(píng)：好作文應(yīng)該是緊扣文章主題，遵循特定的文體格式，選用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z(yǔ)言合理組織文章結(jié)構(gòu)，內(nèi)容統(tǒng)一、連貫，語(yǔ)法、拼寫(xiě)、標(biāo)點(diǎn)正確，用詞恰當(dāng)。