Question

10．在生活中，人們常用有一些快樂(lè)需要分享，煩惱需要傾訴，這時(shí)就需要一個(gè)好的傾聽者．請(qǐng)以Be a good listener 為題寫一篇短文，內(nèi)容必須包括以下要點(diǎn)：
1．一次傾聽的經(jīng)歷（時(shí)間、人物、經(jīng)過(guò)）
2．你對(duì)傾聽的認(rèn)識(shí)（至少兩點(diǎn)）
注意：1．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名、校名和地名；
2．詞數(shù)在80--100之間，已給出的文字不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Be a good listener
I strongly believe it is important to be a good listener．
I used to feel stressed before the exam．However，I kept it to myself，as a result，I felt worried and couldn't pay attention to what the teacher said in class．One day，after
I bravely told it to my close friend，I felt that relaxed．
Being a good listener plays an important role in communication．Parents should listen to their children，so they will understand them better and trust each other．Teachers should also listen to their students so that they can increase their understanding and improve relationships．Students should listen to their classmates，then their friendship will be increased and they will help each other．
In a word，good listening can really make us get closer to each other．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇話題作文．內(nèi)容是以Be a good listener 為題寫出一次傾聽的經(jīng)歷以及你對(duì)傾聽的認(rèn)識(shí)．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．一次傾聽的經(jīng)歷（時(shí)間、人物、經(jīng)過(guò)）
2．你對(duì)傾聽的認(rèn)識(shí)（至少兩點(diǎn)）
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
used to do sth 過(guò)去常常
as a result 因此
pay attention to 留意
listen to sb 聆聽某人
in a word 總之
make sb do sth 讓某人做某事
【高分句型】
1．However，I kept it to myself，①as a result，I felt worried and couldn't ②pay attention to ③what the teacher said in class．
①as a result相當(dāng)于一個(gè)連詞，且要用逗號(hào)與后面的句子隔開，是因此，所以的意思
②pay attention to 留意，關(guān)注，to是介詞．
③what作為引導(dǎo)詞的賓語(yǔ)從句，作為介詞的賓語(yǔ)．
2．Teachers should also listen to their students so that they can increase their understanding and improve relationships．
so that 引導(dǎo)的目的狀語(yǔ)從句．
3．①In a word，good listening can really ②make us get closer to each other．
①in a word 總之
②make sb do sth 讓某人做某事，get close to sb接近某人

解答 Be a good listener
I strongly believe it is important to be a good listener．
   I used to feel stressed before the exam．However，I kept it to myself，as a result，I felt worried and couldn't pay attention to what the teacher said in class．【高分句型】One day，after I bravely told it to my close friend，I felt that relaxed．
（一次傾聽的經(jīng)歷（時(shí)間、人物、經(jīng)過(guò)））
   Being a good listener plays an important role in communication．Parents should listen to their children，so they will understand them better and trust each other．Teachers should also listen to their students so that they can increase their understanding and improve relationships．【高分句型】Students should listen to their classmates，then their friendship will be increased and they will help each other．（你對(duì)傾聽的認(rèn)識(shí)）
   In a word，good listening can really make us get closer to each other．【高分句型】

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這是一個(gè)話題作文，要求寫出一次傾聽的經(jīng)歷以及你對(duì)傾聽的認(rèn)識(shí)．記敘一次傾聽的經(jīng)歷，要把事件的時(shí)間，地點(diǎn)，人物，事件的經(jīng)過(guò)寫清楚，用第一人稱，用一般過(guò)去時(shí)進(jìn)行寫作．描寫自己對(duì)傾聽的認(rèn)識(shí)，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，要體現(xiàn)出積極向上的思想．短文開頭直接表達(dá)了作者的觀點(diǎn)：當(dāng)一名好的聽眾很重要；第二段寫自己與人分享自己煩惱前后自己的不同感受；第三段講明了當(dāng)一位好的聽眾的好處；最后一段小結(jié)：總而言之，很好地傾聽可以讓我們彼此走得更近．短文敘述清楚，層次分明．特雖是第三段中，用了一系列的排比句，讀起來(lái)感到瑯瑯上口，有一股強(qiáng)大的氣勢(shì)，增強(qiáng)了文章的表達(dá)效果．