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12．假設(shè)你是張麗，是家住四川蘆山地震災(zāi)區(qū)林娜的筆友．她給你發(fā)來(lái)了一封電子郵件，請(qǐng)看后給她回復(fù)，針對(duì)她的問(wèn)題給她一些建議，并談?wù)勀愕南敕ǎ?br />

Dear Zhang Li， I have been so sad these days．As you know，an earthquake happened in my hometown and both my parents died．Though the government gives us much help，my little sister and I cried every night because of missing，and I don't want to learn anything．I find it hard to talk with the people around．Life is dark for me without parents'love! What should I do？I really need your help． Yours， Lin Na

Dear Lin Na， I'm so sorry to hear the sad news． I understand you．.Everyone need parents'love．But when they leave the world，we must learn to take care of ourselves and face the difficulties bravely． So please stop crying and try your best to study harder to get a better future．Besides，you should take good care of your sister and help her live a happy life．What's more，it's useful to talk about your problems with the people around you．And my parents and I can also help you． I think it's important for you to be strong and brave．I believe you will be better soon． I hope what I said can help you． Yours， Zhang Li

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分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是給家住四川蘆山地震災(zāi)區(qū)林娜回信，針對(duì)她的問(wèn)題給她一些建議，并談?wù)勀愕南敕ǎ�注意信件的格式．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第一、二人稱．
琳娜的來(lái)信大意是：父母在地震中身亡，雖然父母給力大力支持，但是我和我的妹妹因?yàn)橄肽罡改福�每晚都哭泣，我也不想學(xué)習(xí)，我發(fā)現(xiàn)很難和身邊的人交流，沒(méi)有父母的生活是黑暗的，我該怎么辦？
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1．學(xué)會(huì)照顧自己，勇敢面對(duì)；
2．努力學(xué)習(xí)，照顧妹妹；和身邊的人交流
3．堅(jiān)強(qiáng)勇敢很重要
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
take care of 照顧
stop doing sth 停止做某事
try one's best to do sth 盡力做某事
what's more 再者
【高分句型】
1．But ①when they leave the world，we must learn to②take care of ourselves and face the difficulties bravely．
①when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．
②take care of 照顧
2．So please①stop crying and ②try your best to study harder③to get a better future．
①stop doing sth 停止做某事
②try one's best to do sth 盡力做某事
③動(dòng)詞不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)．
3．I think ①②it's important for you to be strong and brave．
①think后省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語(yǔ)從句．
②it is+adj+for sb+to do sth對(duì)某人來(lái)說(shuō)做某事是怎么樣的，it是形式主語(yǔ)，動(dòng)詞不定式做真正主語(yǔ)．

解答 Dear Lin Na，
I'm so sorry to hear the sad news．
I understand you．Everyone need parents'love．But when they leave the world，we must learn to take care of ourselves and face the difficulties bravely．【高分句型】（學(xué)會(huì)照顧自己，勇敢面對(duì)）
So please stop crying and try your best to study harder to get a better future．【高分句型】Besides，you should take good care of your sister and help her live a happy life．What's more，it's useful to talk about your problems with the people around you．And my parents and I can also help you．（努力學(xué)習(xí)，照顧妹妹，和身邊的人交流）
I think it's important for you to be strong and brave．【高分句型】（堅(jiān)強(qiáng)勇敢很重要）I believe you will be better soon．
I hope what I said can help you．
Yours，
Zhang Li

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本本文難度不大，一般都有話可說(shuō)，寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中寫(xiě)作條理性要把握好，對(duì)于自己所提出的建議，寫(xiě)的過(guò)程中通過(guò)變換句式和用詞上來(lái)提高語(yǔ)言的美度．在一件事情寫(xiě)完后要用上表關(guān)系的連接詞，或平時(shí)積累的各類(lèi)表遞進(jìn)、并列的連詞來(lái)是文章富于活力．在平時(shí)的練習(xí)中要多去背誦范文，對(duì)表達(dá)好的句子，短語(yǔ)要進(jìn)行積累，并默寫(xiě)，考試前再集中看一下，這樣做到有備無(wú)患．