Question

11．根據(jù)要求完成小作文，詞數(shù)：30-40詞左右．
在你的成長(zhǎng)過(guò)程中，家人和老師傾注了大量的心血．他們對(duì)你的生活和學(xué)習(xí)除了給予關(guān)心，幫助之外，也會(huì)給你提出一些建議．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)自己的情況，列舉他們給你的關(guān)心，幫助和建議．My parents are very kind and helpful．They cook meals and wash clothes for me every day． At the weekend，they often prepare some of my favorite food．Sometimes they also help me with my lessons．They are very strict with me．but when I make a mistake，they first listen to me and then have a talk with me instead of complaining about it．They always try to understand me．I think it is a good way for a child to grow up．With their care，I am living and studying happily．．

Answer 1

分析 動(dòng)筆前應(yīng)先認(rèn)真閱讀材料，圍繞所給材料組織內(nèi)容，確定主要短語(yǔ)，句式等問(wèn)題．題中包含了這些要點(diǎn)：①家人和老師你的生活和學(xué)習(xí)的關(guān)心；②給你的幫助和建議．注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，句子要通順連貫，沒(méi)有語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤．
高分句型一
they first listen to me and then have a talk with me instead of  complaining about it他們先聽(tīng)我說(shuō)，然后跟我談，而不是抱怨．instead of  而不是，注意后面應(yīng)該用動(dòng)名詞．
高分句型二
I think it  is a good way for a child to grow up我認(rèn)為這是孩子成長(zhǎng)的好方法．這是一個(gè)賓語(yǔ)從句，I think是主句，it  is a good way for a child to grow up是從句．

解答 My parents are very kind and helpful．They cook meals and wash clothes for me every day． At the weekend，they often prepare some of my favorite food．【要點(diǎn)一，家人對(duì)你的生活和學(xué)習(xí)的關(guān)心】Sometimes they also help me with my lessons．They are very strict with me．but when I make a mistake，they first listen to me and then have a talk with me instead of  complaining about it【高分句型一，注意 instead of  的使用】．They always try to understand me．I think it  is a good way for a child to grow up【高分句型二，注意 賓語(yǔ)從句的使用】．With their care，I am living and studying happily．【要點(diǎn)二，給你的幫助和建議】

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本篇寫(xiě)作需注意要求中所提供的要點(diǎn)，不可遺漏．需在平時(shí)積累相關(guān)的詞匯，多閱讀此類題材，將詞匯歸類整理；動(dòng)筆前可以按照材料內(nèi)容列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，寫(xiě)出關(guān)鍵單詞．寫(xiě)作中注意語(yǔ)義通順，符合邏輯關(guān)系．