Question

七年級(jí)正在舉行一場(chǎng)作文比賽，你也想?yún)⒓颖荣�，你想以An amazing animal---goldfish為題寫一篇關(guān)于金魚（goldfish）的文章，以下是你能夠收集到的信息，現(xiàn)在就動(dòng)手吧！
金魚離開水不能生活；
金魚在睡覺的時(shí)候能睜著眼睛；
一些金魚在白天睡覺，一些金魚在晚上睡覺；
金魚每次不能喂得太多；
金魚的記憶力只能持續(xù)3秒鐘。
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要求：語(yǔ)句通順，條理清楚，可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，詞數(shù)100詞左右

Answer 1

An amazing animal---goldfish
Goldfish are a cute and amazing animal.Most of the children like them.They can’t live without water. They need to sleep. They are asleep with their eyes open.Some of them usually sleep in the daytime.Others like sleeping at night.They can’t eat too much at a time.It is said that they can remember things only for three seconds.Also we must keep the water clean.

試題分析：本文是敘述的關(guān)于金魚的生活習(xí)慣的問(wèn)題，所以句子的時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。應(yīng)該盡量包括文中提示的內(nèi)容，可稍加拓展。內(nèi)容上應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，句子應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣，適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】短文用了一些短語(yǔ)和句式，增加了文章的色彩，如：Others like sleeping at night.They can’t eat too much at a time.It is said that they can remember things only for three seconds.Also we must keep the water clean.等。文中用了with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)，如：They are asleep with their eyes open。增加了短文的亮點(diǎn)，提醒學(xué)生平時(shí)積累一些短語(yǔ)和句式，以便用在寫作中。